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levity kiss (Free verse) by skaskowski rules fall before,
falling after,
then after.
what once was a frivolous kiss
amidst the laughter.
you commit-or you sin,
singed with lipstick
afire.
one kiss marks the end.
or you begin as
a liar.
Up the ladder:
Your Beauty
Down the ladder:
In My Arms
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Posted: January 13, 2006 2:59 AM PST; Last modified: January 13, 2006 2:59 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6728 Comments:
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skaskowski @ 70.225.165.248
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13-Jan-06/3:00 AM
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okay, so everyone knows, there was wordplay involved... levity kiss... leviticus... i wish i didnt keep having to explain myself, but go from there, okay? i wont dissect the rest.
I'm glad you explained that. But why not just let the first line be: Leviticus, levity kiss.
"singed with lipstick" is good.
thank you.
I get the "rules"-Leviticus intent, I guess (Leviticus is the book that deals w/ rules and ritual, right?), but the connection seems flimsy.
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