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Road Tripped (Free verse) by Blindpoetry Pain couldn't be the cause of this
Your the pedaphile
Pain shouldn't be blamed for this
I have a smile
What this is
Is just a fase
What this is
Is just a angsty fase
You walk all along
And never find loose change
You walk forever
And always find loose receits
Turn in my body
So I can go to sleep
Turn in this body
So I can find a deep deep
Pillow
Find your way through
The tunneling gates
Find a way through
The surrounding gates
Walk and walk alone
Down the streets of
Hay hay ven
And be eaten today
This is what you
Deserve for every
Things can't be pronounced
But can be broken
My heart and yours
We were like chinese checkers
Your going to jump my men
And find another...
Up the ladder:
In My Arms
Down the ladder:
limits
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Posted: December 28, 2004 7:11 PM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2004 7:11 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6730 Comments:
There you are!!
Personally I don't bother much about votes. I appreciate comments more because it helps me know what exactly one thinks of my poem and it helps me improve. A 9 from me.
jump her men too... 10
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Ain't it supposed to be YOU ARE??
You read it the same.
Who cares.
Spelling PHASE as FASE is acceptable and infact quite fine. That much of liberation is fine but YOUR and YOU ARE means two different things and can never be used as substitutes.
Could you please read my latest poem too? It's another acrostic.
And i already read it.