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Road Tripped (Free verse) by Blindpoetry

Pain couldn't be the cause of this Your the pedaphile Pain shouldn't be blamed for this I have a smile What this is Is just a fase What this is Is just a angsty fase You walk all along And never find loose change You walk forever And always find loose receits Turn in my body So I can go to sleep Turn in this body So I can find a deep deep Pillow Find your way through The tunneling gates Find a way through The surrounding gates Walk and walk alone Down the streets of Hay hay ven And be eaten today This is what you Deserve for every Things can't be pronounced But can be broken My heart and yours We were like chinese checkers Your going to jump my men And find another...

Bhaskaryya 28-Dec-04/10:31 PM
But it's important to poetry. They mean different things.

Spelling PHASE as FASE is acceptable and infact quite fine. That much of liberation is fine but YOUR and YOU ARE means two different things and can never be used as substitutes.

Could you please read my latest poem too? It's another acrostic.




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