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Censor

by nentwined

Member since 2001 · Posted 28 Apr 2005 · Edited 28 Apr 2005 · 12 comments

ONE XXXX by X one XXXX the THOUGHTS trick -- XX le XX thro ugh my skull XXXX and DRAIN XX xxxx in to XXXXX my LIVER w he r e they are FILTERED

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[7] sliver 28-Apr-05/12:08 PM Reply
I don't get the le part.
[n/a] nentwined › sliver 28-Apr-05/12:11 PM Reply
Eh. It's mildly retarded.

trickle

trick--
le

maybe?

just trying to drip the thoughts down, ish.
[n/a] nentwined › sliver 28-Apr-05/12:18 PM Reply
I bet this is much, much worse now. :)
[n/a] <~> › nentwined 28-Apr-05/12:21 PM Reply
i XXXX
XX like
X itXX.
[7] sliver › <~> 28-Apr-05/12:23 PM Reply
It does get the point acrost better now tho'. Some times it's like that.
[n/a] nentwined › sliver 28-Apr-05/12:23 PM Reply
Cool. =)

Thanks.
[7] sliver › nentwined 28-Apr-05/12:26 PM Reply
It would work alot better if you could roll your word endings down, if you know what I mean. It would show how your thoughts have a tendency to droop at times.
[10] zodiac 29-Apr-05/4:57 AM Reply
I don't get it. So nothing's actually censored, it just has a bunch of odd Xs inserted?
[n/a] nentwined › zodiac 29-Apr-05/9:22 AM Reply
Thoughts were censored on the way; words were picked after others were discarded. Or that's the best I can do on 20 hours of sleep this week.
[7] PoeticXTC 14-Jan-06/6:01 PM Reply
lol
[8] lmp 26-May-06/3:38 PM Reply
cute. sorry, i know that may sound like a comment best left unsaid, but i do like it. i think you could do more with it, maybe editing a poem you have already written so there are no adjectives? and still convey the message...
[6] Jill Stockinger 15-Jan-07/7:53 PM Reply
So the censor is XXXing all those thoughts or lines-
like pee filtered in your body by the liver-
still not a great poem, though I guess I understood it-