calliope
on angst of the saints by calliope
13 Jan 2006, 3:11 AM
come on... zondervan? or even... guttenburg? yes, i know i spelled that wrong.
read this in a hurried manner.
okay, so everyone knows, there was wordplay involved... levity kiss... leviticus... i wish i didnt keep having to explain myself, but go from there, okay? i wont dissect the rest.
I despise using dictionaries and thesauri unless I'm looking up the spelling of a word. By the way, a deprecation is a sort of prayer. Also, I used deil's (the devil's) smiles as a metaphor for the people who the Vendor makes suffer.
Formerly another poem altogether. A change of style nad experimental for me here and suggestions (if any) most welcome.
A similar style to Dark Angel and pretty amusing.
Are you related?
Very nice poem.
I'm glad you explained that. But why not just let the first line be: Leviticus, levity kiss.
"singed with lipstick" is good.
It seems the last line should be, "i'm just as surprised as you when i reply."
This might be way off. Criticism welcome. I'm trying to figure it out..... though haven't had a lot of time to think about it. With kids.........!
The idea's quite good though the presentation could have been a bit more connected. I liked it. Keep it up.
"beef we don't need is still beef indeed" nailed it for me.
Or even six-eight-six (or some other variation) if done right. The syllable count is the least of it. Very few (not I) can do it well, though.
Your name is fun to say.
Dovina, I hope you don't mind, but, personally I feel you haven't conveyed your matter very clearly. Somehow, I don't feel very impressed by it.
Hmmmm. Quite good. ;-)
This would be relevent in the 1960s or to people in their 60s. Besides, ethnic people aren't trying to end racism through being nice. They're just being nice.
I do love the fact that I'm pretty much guaranteed a few fancy words whenever I read your poems.
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awww!!! Someone special, something very special