| Re: The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu |
Enkidu 172.192.144.154 |
12-Jan-06/10:31 PM |
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I despise using dictionaries and thesauri unless I'm looking up the spelling of a word. By the way, a deprecation is a sort of prayer. Also, I used deil's (the devil's) smiles as a metaphor for the people who the Vendor makes suffer.
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| Re: levity kiss by skaskowski |
skaskowski 70.225.165.248 |
13-Jan-06/3:00 AM |
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okay, so everyone knows, there was wordplay involved... levity kiss... leviticus... i wish i didnt keep having to explain myself, but go from there, okay? i wont dissect the rest.
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| Re: angst of the saints by calliope |
calliope 70.225.165.248 |
13-Jan-06/3:11 AM |
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come on... zondervan? or even... guttenburg? yes, i know i spelled that wrong.
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| Re: regret by FreeFormFixation |
FreeFormFixation 70.225.165.248 |
13-Jan-06/3:15 AM |
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read this in a hurried manner.
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| Re: The funeral and the table by Caducus |
Caducus 172.213.134.2 |
13-Jan-06/6:49 AM |
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Formerly another poem altogether. A change of style nad experimental for me here and suggestions (if any) most welcome.
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| Re: Brogues are best by Stephen Robins |
Caducus 172.213.134.2 |
13-Jan-06/6:51 AM |
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A similar style to Dark Angel and pretty amusing.
Are you related?
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| Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo |
Dental Panic 84.27.6.94 |
13-Jan-06/10:15 AM |
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| Re: levity kiss by skaskowski |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
13-Jan-06/12:49 PM |
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I'm glad you explained that. But why not just let the first line be: Leviticus, levity kiss.
"singed with lipstick" is good.
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| Re: angst of the saints by calliope |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
13-Jan-06/12:51 PM |
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It seems the last line should be, "i'm just as surprised as you when i reply."
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| Re: A Haiku by amanda_dcosta |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
13-Jan-06/9:28 PM |
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This might be way off. Criticism welcome. I'm trying to figure it out..... though haven't had a lot of time to think about it. With kids.........!
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| Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
13-Jan-06/9:33 PM |
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The idea's quite good though the presentation could have been a bit more connected. I liked it. Keep it up.
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| Re: eat your dinner meats by calliope |
ecargo 172.137.66.171 |
13-Jan-06/10:12 PM |
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"beef we don't need is still beef indeed" nailed it for me.
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| Re: A Haiku by amanda_dcosta |
ecargo 172.137.66.171 |
13-Jan-06/10:16 PM |
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Or even six-eight-six (or some other variation) if done right. The syllable count is the least of it. Very few (not I) can do it well, though.
Your name is fun to say.
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| Re: Racism 2 by Dovina |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
14-Jan-06/12:04 AM |
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Dovina, I hope you don't mind, but, personally I feel you haven't conveyed your matter very clearly. Somehow, I don't feel very impressed by it.
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| Re: Flow by zodiac |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
14-Jan-06/3:25 AM |
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| Re: Racism 2 by Dovina |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
14-Jan-06/5:03 AM |
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This would be relevent in the 1960s or to people in their 60s. Besides, ethnic people aren't trying to end racism through being nice. They're just being nice.
I do love the fact that I'm pretty much guaranteed a few fancy words whenever I read your poems.
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| Re: Racism 2 by Dovina |
zodiac 209.193.18.212 |
14-Jan-06/10:47 AM |
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I cannot fucking believe you're still doing this. Please, for once take the hint: YOU DON'T KNOW ABOUT MINORITIES. YOU DON'T ACTUALLY KNOW ANY BLACK PEOPLE. EVERYTHING YOU WRITE ABOUT THEM COMES OFF SOUNDING INSANE.
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| Re: Racism 2 by Dovina |
zodiac 209.193.18.212 |
14-Jan-06/10:50 AM |
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In short, if you want to improve your poetry, consider selling your house in Orange County, quitting your job, and moving somewhere with real ethnic balance, like Charlotte.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/4:36 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/4:40 PM |
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awww!!! Someone special, something very special
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