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Schoolyard Walls (Free verse) by Joe-joe
The sounds of children playing rebound off the old schoolyard walls. Reflections of giggling bobby socked and pigtailed girls and boys quarreling over a catch that clearly was not made. Time has had its way with this sacred tomb. And tittering girls and ball playing boys have long since abandoned this urban field of dreams. But those voices---they remain bound in this hallowed place along with scores of others that I could never hear. Only my own---only those in my time - - - when I stroll by that cavern with cap in hand, remembering so clearly that one handed catch I made near the old stain glass doors.

Up the ladder: The Friendship Storm
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.2689414
Overall Rank: 3824
Posted: January 3, 2006 11:18 AM PST; Last modified: January 3, 2006 3:14 PM PST
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[6] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 3-Jan-06/11:35 AM | Reply
"bobby sock pick tailed girls" I won't even ask.
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > Dovina | 3-Jan-06/1:13 PM | Reply
Before your time...I guess.
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Joe-joe | 3-Jan-06/2:22 PM | Reply
I think she might be implying you're a Humbert Humbert.
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > ALChemy | 3-Jan-06/2:42 PM | Reply
Perhaps or maybe there is a special Lolita in your life that has finally gotten the best of you.
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Joe-joe | 3-Jan-06/10:13 PM | Reply
No, none of them have got the best of me. On the contrary, they're working for me on the street corner in Brooklyn. That's how I know about you. You have to admit "Joe-Joe" "Humbert Humbert" quite a coincidence.
Chill man I'm just kiddin'. I actually think this poem's pretty good. You can't be that nasty if you live in Brooklyn. Now The Bronx, well that's a whole different story.
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > ALChemy | 4-Jan-06/5:42 AM | Reply
Al,

I'm only kidding too. The Humbert Humbert reference was actually pretty funny. Didn't Peter Sellers and James mason star in the film (Lolita, early to mid 60's)??? I think we're both showing our age here!!!
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Joe-joe | 4-Jan-06/6:08 AM | Reply
I believe I've only seen it once so I'm not sure(which surprises me 'cause I'm a big Kubrick fan). I think Mason was in it but I'm not sure about Sellers(that might be Dr Strangelove). I was born in the early 70's but my parents watched a lot of old movies on TV while I was growing up.
I'd just come off a big debate so I guess I was still a bit punchy with my comments. My apologies.
[7] PoeticXTC @ 152.163.100.135 | 3-Jan-06/11:44 AM | Reply
creative perspective
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 3-Jan-06/3:04 PM | Reply
Unless you mean something very annoying, try "pigtailed."
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > Dovina | 3-Jan-06/3:11 PM | Reply
Ah, I see you're a graduate of the Zodiac school of higher criticism. Could have made the correction right off the bat and saved the silly sarcasm for another occasion.
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > Joe-joe | 3-Jan-06/3:14 PM | Reply
No, I flunked out of that school on the first day. It's not sarcasm really. I was just thinking about the various ways to interpret it.
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > Dovina | 3-Jan-06/3:17 PM | Reply
I'm happy to hear that you flunked out...that makes you at very least a decent person. Be well.
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > Joe-joe | 3-Jan-06/3:20 PM | Reply
Careful, the Teacher is watching.
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > Dovina | 3-Jan-06/3:24 PM | Reply
I'm not worried...he stopped talking to me about a year ago after I sent him on a wild goose chase...made him look quite silly...long story.
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > Joe-joe | 3-Jan-06/3:30 PM | Reply
Do you mean "A Proclamation to Our Lord"?
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > Dovina | 4-Jan-06/5:50 AM | Reply
No. I told the dud that I was a professor at the prestigious New School for Social Research in NYC. I gave him clues about my identity and had him search for me in the NS website. All of this after he repeatedly accused me of being intellectually challenged. The irony of it all was quite amusing to me. He’s chomping at the bit as we speak.
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Joe-joe | 4-Jan-06/6:17 AM | Reply
Be careful not to do that too often though. It can ruin your credibility and then no one will take anything you say seriously. Just ask Dark Angel.
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Joe-joe | 15-Jan-06/11:26 AM | Reply
How did you know that he wouldn't know who Roger Daltrey was? Which, by the way he corrected your spelling on.

"Though I know that the hypnotized never lie" -Roger Daltrey from the song "We won't get fooled again".
[6] LilMsLadyPoet @ 207.69.139.139 | 3-Jan-06/9:06 PM | Reply
giggling, bobby-socked girls, stained-glass I believe it should be.
I like this...sweet.
A little rough around the edges at>
"along with scores of others that I could never hear.
Only my own---only those in my time - - -
[6] LilMsLadyPoet @ 72.48.104.244 | 3-Jan-06/9:07 PM | Reply
giggling, bobby-socked girls, stained-glass,
one-handed, I believe it should be.
I like this...sweet.
A little rough around the edges at>
"along with scores of others that I could never hear.
Only my own---only those in my time - - -
[7] Niphredil @ 132.68.1.29 | 4-Jan-06/8:53 AM | Reply
"stained glass", not "stain glass". Plus I don't care for the triple dashes ---; one is more than enough.

Other than that, it's very nice.
[7] pollywolly @ 62.30.170.78 | 15-Jan-06/11:01 AM | Reply
i thought this was super, great use of descriptive language where you can almost here the children playing and chattering. well done
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