Put this zero score into your stocking, dear.

has some charm

doesn't make it for me- some nice images, but did not jell-

Full of light and grace and airiness- lovely to read!

It's hard to make decent poetry from heart felt anger over war and politics- not a bad effort-

To call this tedious hokum would be too great a compliment. Had you thought of shoving it up your ass?

Would be better withoiut the "There"'s. i.e., "Magnetic words on the fridge"

feels very real.

parts too unclear, i liked the last 3 lines- with paper of my face- don't use a metaphor if you won't develop it or DId you mean Off my face, as Dovina asked--

very lyrical

Ah yes indeedy, I recognise the odour so well; it is particularly strong as it arises from the previous commentator's poetry.

Nearly as badly written as something by Rockmage. In short, terrible.

I would just love to be say how great this is. But that would be a lie. It hits rock bottom in all senses except pretentiousness.

Suspiciously familiar. A richly deserved zero.

Illiterate shit

It is not often one comes across such a beautiful piece of versification as this one. Thank fuck.

Your spelling and poetic ability are on a par with shuushit's. This is more of a weeping sore than a pimple.

This made me puke

How beat-y. 1/10

I think you mean "then" in Line 3, not "so". Even so, it's unnecessarily tied up in "if"'s.