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fox and hounds (Free verse) by nentwined ceremonial baboon laughs full at the moon and rain,
fox and hounds let out to play;
cunning acid drives his running thighs;
tonight one anger will be denied.
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Posted: October 24, 2005 12:30 PM PDT; Last modified: October 24, 2005 12:30 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.5715003 Overall Rank: 2424 Comments:
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Dovina @ 69.175.32.104
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24-Oct-05/1:04 PM
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Uncanny, the similarities with "Eclipse" But you have a baboon.
Well, you were never going to be able to get away with the moon's laughter running down your thigh. Nice attempt.
Why baboon? I assume it means the fox.
besides the dogs anger, who else has anger and why? The one anger actually seems to imply one out of two or more. "an anger" would be clearer. This would make a great introduction to something. Love the suggestion of rhyme in this poem.
Moon's affection ?..........
doesn't make it for me-
some nice images, but did not jell- 498 view(s)
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