Sasha
on THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void
9 May 2004, 8:39 PM
Not a sonnet
No vote
largess should be largesse
Very good
-9-
doesen't grab me
Ten!
Nuff said
Jesus
Not a Villanelle
So no vote
What the fuck
Not bad
Okay, I'm sorry but if you are younger than 300 years old this is slightly rediculous.
However, points for the form
Can we say Prosaic?
Rediculous and forced rhymes
a satchel of shit
Jesus
An endearingly heartfelt guff.
BLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEE EEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRHGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG HHHHHHHHHH!
-10_
Beautiful.
Lemme guess - red?
Excellent.
If you were forced - let's say at gunpoint, or else by some crazed chef wielding a large rancid hamhock - anyway, I'm getting off topic: What I mean is, if you were forced by a hamhock-wielding maniac to identify yourself some other way than by your connection to Dave, could you? You should probably think about this question a lot more than you're going to.
I disagree with hypatia. I find the rhymes here sublime, though pity/serendipity did feel rather like throwing myself at a full run into the back of a parked Dodge Dart.