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IRONSHOE (Villanelle) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. He's a pinnacle of conformity
In spite of his deformity -
The hideous enormity
Of his Metallic Hooves.
He lost his pedestria
Fighting Cognac in Korea -
For he tried to pass Urea
Upon a land mine.
Lest you think his feet defective
I'd consider this perspective -
He's a brilliant detective
With his own TV show.
But sadly, I was lying
Ironshoe is weak and dying -
And his stumpes are old and drying
Within their steel cage.
To conclude I shall relate
A topic for our next debate -
That this house believes in fate
Because Ironshoe was called Ironshoe before his shoes were blown off.
Up the ladder:
Ode to Nicholas Jones
Down the ladder:
Breeze
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Posted: January 2, 2003 12:00 PM PST; Last modified: January 2, 2003 5:21 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.241634 Overall Rank: 936 Comments:
kool
how dare you fish slap Bachus with perry mason's missing hoof. scoundrel...yes, you consistently amaze me. even through my drug hazes and tantrums, but i can't help but wonder, do you think that if you prayed tonight (right now) to jesu to allow you to shit a turd out tomorrow morning shaped like a small child equipped with a small donkies head holding a corn kernal shaped like a foot fucking our mother's ass in his hand..me and you can some how break into heaven and steal the 'inflamed shoe horn of all fittingness'. jesus i hope so, cuz it's getting dark, and i'm pretty fucking cold and hungry, so could you just push harder...we're running out of time..and you know what happens at midnight...squash sex, again. HURRAY!
D.a. i just went and learned how to write one of these, and i'm just going to come 'out' and say..your structure tweek is unfucking believable..i all of a sudden got it '-' cuz at first i was a bit mislead, by actually the power of your choosen 'hand picked' symbols and layers, and you 'know' your subject matter and combining powers, but i am sitting here right now convinced at this moment, that regardless, of our silent but bursting avoidance of one another..he he. you are an incredibly talented 'gifted' (excuse the term), scribbler..unreal, just fucking to much..this is a masterpiece..if you are indeed younger than me...you are the smartest most innovative creature i've ever had the privelage, of never meeting. there is no swagger award or cue tip, good enough for this..un-fucking real...you're almost too smart for your own good. we are doomed..i am just simply amazed by this..this is a magical poem. not safe, funny, yet serious, aimed at more than one thing and person. i'm sorry i ever doubted you. You, are thee best writer, hands down at poemranker..it's all there..every word absolute and perfect, style self made and possesd with a piece of some element i've never seen..you could very possibly be the philosopher's stone..if you're a nineteen year old college student, i am on drugs. well... i am, but you know what i'm saying
a genuflect, just this once, but no more...i'm watching how, and i am quick to absorb, but don't be a dick..at least tell me if i do it right beyond fucking papasmurf..i value your opinion, and well there is our blatant homosexuality in question here, and probably Settles ward robe for years to come...let's come together...for our children..and for gay lawyers and detectives and firepeople the world over (but, i will restate we really aren't gay, we're just open ended, i mean minded, sorry) ummwhere was i, ah yes, could you ask settle to..return my but marauder 2000..he borrows without asking, or taking it's special hand towel clip, and we both know that hand towels are thee most important thing in a hitchikers bag. thanks..ah..perry mason, never really did it for me, but i do like him better in his smooth cheeked earlier work.
`splosions are good. old detective series are lots of things. 10.
ironside....ironside....
poor, poor ironshoe. next time he'll run away on his stumpy nubs before anyone else can write about him in such a gross fashion.
Not a Villanelle
So no vote
Poetry doesn't have to follow your fascist rules, Sasha.
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