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THE MISSING HEART (Sonnet) by Prince of Void A MISSING HERAT FOLLOWS SWEAT SMELL OF ROSES
THE WONDERS SETTLED DOWN IN LAST CHARMING EYES
AND NIGHTMARE FELL DOWN IN THE FACE OF SMOOTH SUN
THE LOUD VOICES TRON SILKY DREAMS OF SKIES
THE BLANK PAPER FACES THE WORDS OF BIRDES AND MINE
THE SIMPLE BEAUTY FLEW AND RESTTING ON REYS
THE HURTS OF YESTERDAYS WAS LEFT BEHIND FAR BEYS
RIDING THE HORSE TO EDIT EAST AND WEST SUN IN DAWN
OF MY LOVE
Up the ladder:
All teeth when not.
Down the ladder:
Homecoming
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.34375
Posted: October 20, 2002 9:06 PM PDT; Last modified: October 20, 2002 9:06 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.344348 Overall Rank: 13065 Comments:
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21-Oct-02/8:29 AM
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WE MIGHT PERCEIVE YOUR WORDS AS MORE ROMANTIC IF YOU DIDN'T SHOUT ALL THE TIME.
OUCH, I THINK I MUST BE DEAF. THIS ISN'T A SONNET, BY THE WAY. A SONNET HAS FOURTEEN LINES AND RHYMES. SORRY TO DISSAPOINT YOU. HERAT HAS INDEED BEEN MISSING FOR A LONG TIME. 'TRON'? 'RESTTING'? 'REYS'? 'BEYS'? WHAT DO ALGERIAN RULERS HAVE TO DO WITH THIS?
This is not a sonnet. Sonnet has a strict format. Re categorise it
tron and birdes are fun and beys? well what can i says? they are always fabulous with portebellos and bacon.b
THIS HURTS.
It's six lines too short to be a sonnet. What's with the capitalization?
this is not a sonnet, you should look up the structure...
sonnets are strictly iambic pentameter, you can deviate a little, but not that much you also follow a strict ryhme scheme depending on the type english sonnet for instance is: abab cdcd efef gg that last couplet (gg) should answer the previous stanzas somehow
Wickedly obtrusive.
Not a sonnet
No vote
I LAUGHED SO LONG AND LOUDLY THAT I PISSED MY PANTS! TOTAL POMPOUS RUBBISH! I SHALL ADD YOU TO ME "CUNTS" LIST.
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