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Homecoming

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 4 comments

Coffee eyes, Skin painted In a perfect pastel You stand there With your flawless smile My head resting on your shoulder As you hold me Closer Musk and vanilla Make me high As my lips brush your neck Misplaced most of my life, Standing here now, Seems I?m finally coming home

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[n/a] deleted user 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply

While I like the opening image "coffee eyes", it has a negative connotation to me. In fact the whole opening stanza feels negative (though well done), and conflicts with the rest of the poem, especially the closing.

[n/a] ifni 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply

Beautiful imagery.

[8] anonymous 9-Sep-01/5:33 PM Reply

gave me warm tinglies

[4] nentwined 12-May-02/8:30 PM Reply

the first two stanzas seem to be leading up to something, but I can't tell what angle you're taking with the final. perhaps more could be explained, somehow?