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Homecoming (Free verse) by ObiWonKn

Coffee eyes, Skin painted In a perfect pastel You stand there With your flawless smile My head resting on your shoulder As you hold me Closer Musk and vanilla Make me high As my lips brush your neck Misplaced most of my life, Standing here now, Seems I?m finally coming home

markb 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
While I like the opening image "coffee eyes", it has a negative connotation to me. In fact the whole opening stanza feels negative (though well done), and conflicts with the rest of the poem, especially the closing.




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