Poemranker [Poem: All teeth when not.] [by ifni] Tue May 07 20:41:47 PDT 2024

all twisted around myself wondering is he waiting for me? or should I still wait for him? prickly friendship, the beartrap mood, he has a temper like a pit bull, all sweet when right and all teeth when not; guess I'd better call him. 8.15.01 jv

[5]... anonymous @ | 27-Aug-01/4:46 PM | Reply

The last line contains an interesting bit of contradiction. I must say, the most striking part of this piece.

[5] nentwined @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply

although I feel the moment you're describing, I don't feel you've encapsulated it as well as you could have. the flow is off, for me, too much like prose.

[n/a] deleted user @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply

like the title, but the rest of the poem doesn't hold my interest.

[2] nrevatehtni @ | 22-Apr-02/11:27 AM | Reply

sucker

[5] nentwined @ | 9-May-02/4:59 PM | Reply

this sounds more like notes to yourself than a poem, though I appreciate the notes much. :)

[5]... anonymous @ | 10-May-02/11:01 AM | Reply

Done-to-death subject matter, but above-average use of language, with impressive attention paid to those sharp consonant sounds in the middle lines. The author seems to have a developing talent.

[7] hoopoe @ 62.254.32.4 | 21-May-02/9:27 AM | Reply

i like this