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All teeth when not. (Free verse) by ifni

all twisted around myself wondering is he waiting for me? or should I still wait for him? prickly friendship, the beartrap mood, he has a temper like a pit bull, all sweet when right and all teeth when not; guess I'd better call him. 8.15.01 jv

nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
although I feel the moment you're describing, I don't feel you've encapsulated it as well as you could have. the flow is off, for me, too much like prose.




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