"on a summers ablaze" doesn't make any sense. And this is not a villanelle. -No vote-

Check out -Lunge fish-, one of mine. similar motif. The ranker's not giving me an i/d for it. I feel so lost.

Truely inspired for someone of his intellectual stature. He has nearly reached the end of the alphabet.

For a first attempt, it looks like one of mine, but no where near as rude.

brilliant, love you Bob.

Apparently geese play a large part in your life. In California you may be able to marry one.

thanks - great minds think alike

That's one of the best poems I've ever read!!

It's hard for me to believe that anyone could find fault in this. Yet someone with more knowledge than I, might.

Good one!

That's your leaving rant?! What a crock!

A form all your own, elements of the interlocking Rubyat, the Terza Rima and so much else. I have one solitary gripe: The penultimate line. The rhyme (...and did forget...) seems forced here. "And forgot" seems more natural although I understand sacrificing sense to sound. An awkward construction with an auxillary verb instead of a smoothe preterite seems out of place here. However that sole fault is not reason enough not to give you a -10-

Well said. Adieu and Fare-well.

I wonder why hypatia changed her name to "Deleted User".....I liked the old name better....

This is a good one, for shizzle.

Wow, the rhythm and overall composition is amazing! Even if you weren't really reading the words, you fall in love with it just by the way it sounds! Good work!

I find this to be, through no fault of your own, entirely too much like entirely too many other poems on this subject to give it anything more than an 8

I think this poem is far above my comprehension lol, but it seems to be very in-depth and significant.

What is this? I'm confused...:/

This poem is so beautiful!! I just wanted to cry! I could picture everything and it felt so real...*sighs* You have some talent!