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An Angel's Caress (Other) by Southern_Bell
A gentle breeze blows and i sigh The breeze feels like soft feathers of wings Wings of a angel sent from above I slowly open my eyes and i see your smiling face I smile and hold out my hand You take my hand and in your arms Folding you velvet white wings around me I look into your eyes and see warmth there You speak softly to me and tell me you will always be there I smile and close my eyes When i open them again you are not there, but in my heart.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8333335
Weighted score: 5.2241178
Overall Rank: 4273
Posted: July 24, 2003 11:27 PM PDT; Last modified: July 24, 2003 11:27 PM PDT
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[5] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 25-Jul-03/3:54 AM | Reply
A suggestion if i may re: line 2 (soft feathers of wings) the 'of wings' part is not really needed as we would associate that they come from wings, also the 'above' we know angels come from above (and below depending on the orgin of the angel). Its not bad and reads well but the words are simply there to suit nothing but the rhyme scheme.

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[n/a] Southern_Bell @ 209.214.109.198 > Caducus | 25-Jul-03/12:53 PM | Reply
Thanks Caducus i will take that into consideration. = )
[10] cuddlytiger17 @ 64.80.246.102 | 10-May-04/1:05 PM | Reply
This poem is so beautiful!! I just wanted to cry! I could picture everything and it felt so real...*sighs* You have some talent!
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