Ann, you might want to try writing poems on a subject other than lost love. Teen romance is overdone by so many and in such a mediocre manner that it has become an automatic cliché. I'm giving you fair warning: Many other people on this site will be very impolite in telling you what they think of poems like this.

This is a really good poem but unfortunately I have a very short attention span...

Interesting...

this is scary...:/

Awww, i feel so much sympathy for the speaker...I can relate on many levels and this is such a sincere poem. The only critcism i have is that a few lines i stumbled over, they didn't flow as smoothly. Otherwise, I commend you on this.

Uh...?

I admire you for your blunt wording. You say what you mean without holding back. Everything flows so smoothly, its a real piece of work. Congrats!

You have so much emotion into this, it really grabs the readers attention. I like it a lot!!!

I don't know, certain parts just don't seem to fit together right...It seems like you tried a little too hard or something...

I REALLY like this poem!!! I don't care what anyone else says, You've got it together! LOL theres no need to say anything else!

I would suggest taking this down before you get the happy plagiarist award for submitting a Pedro The Lion song. Unless, of course, you are Pedro the Lion...in which case, allis forgiven.

A bit sappy but alright.

you can try to be unique not one person like yourself you're really really different just like EVERYBODY ELSE! This is really great. Certainly the best part of the whole poem.

What? Okay, after the 4th re-read I happened to get it. Not bad

asking 'Could I possibly be next?' This sounds rather choppy. You may want to work on your rhyme scheme. All in all I liked it

Excellently done Especially good rhymes

I really enjoyed this-the rhymes and imagery are effective, good job.

theres some really good stuff here, i think you were able to express your thoughts well, it was a nice read, well done

Very ephemeral, but still grounded in reality. Good, especially with the natural rhymes There's a palpable but faint feeling feeling here of Fitzgerald's: "A book of verses underneath the bough A jug of wine, a loaf of bread, and thou Beside me singing in the wilderness And wilderness is paradise enow."

Not bad, but for a country & Western song this should really be: I don't want you 'round here no more