Re: A prom that could never be by Eric Johnson	30-Sep-02/5:53 PM
I disagree with horus (what's new?). It flows well. This is my favorite of your pieces.
Re: My Angel by emilys369	30-Sep-02/5:39 PM
Not bad. I'd be interested to read more.
Re: The ONE by Eline	30-Sep-02/5:30 PM
Effective.
Re: A Guilty Bride's Demise by eldorado	30-Sep-02/5:28 PM
I get it. I think. Or do I? Oh well, I liked it anyway.
Re: Surprise by edge	30-Sep-02/5:24 PM
Haha. Surprise ending.
Re: First Impression by devotedwonder	24-Sep-02/11:45 AM
I like this one... cuz we've all been there.
Re: Black Heart by brazen	15-Sep-02/11:17 AM
Ok, I know nothing about painting, and apparently little more about writing, but I'm going to have to agree with brazen on this one. When you are writing fiction or a research artile, revision is great; essential, even. However, pieces such as this one are meant to tell a story of emotions - describing how you felt at the precise moment in which it was written. In my opinion, revising such works later can only serve to tell a different story; not to improve upon the first one.
Re: Pissing Rant by brazen	15-Sep-02/11:02 AM
Wow, that's... angry. But effective.
Re: 50 miles an hour by BEBO	14-Sep-02/10:17 PM
Nice lyric. Better than most crap you hear on the radio these days.
Re: Best Friends by ashtar	12-Sep-02/5:22 PM
Brutal. But good.
Re: The success of a relationship by april fool	12-Sep-02/5:12 PM
Me again. I really enjoy your writing. Profound yet humorous all at once.
Re: I heard it on the grapevine by april fool	12-Sep-02/5:06 PM
Haha. Cute.
Re: Bloody Lawyers by april fool	12-Sep-02/5:04 PM
That vote of one was just wrong. I enjoyed it.
Re: Eahtatiene by 1Sapphire1	11-Sep-02/1:17 PM
I disagree. Doesn't seem at all forced to me. I like.
Re: Simile by *Lyrisick*	11-Sep-02/6:40 AM
I agree with christof. I like the content, but standard English will work better for you. Nice job.
Re: Ever Felt by nightii	11-Sep-02/6:36 AM
I have now. 7.
Re: a comment on Waking Up by PawnedTidal	10-Sep-02/8:59 AM
This isn't about parents, I am certainly no teen, and I think you are confusing angst with anger. Since when is being a little angry a bad thing? A zero, knowit? That's cold.
Re: a comment on I'm Sorry by PawnedTidal	9-Sep-02/8:31 PM
Thanks, Tarquin. This poem was one that came easier and more quickly than most I've written. Guess there's no motivation like the one that got away, huh?
Re: Diminishing by <~>	8-Sep-02/8:57 AM
Very well written. 8/10
Re: Her Light by wunboi	8-Sep-02/8:55 AM
I like.