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Ever Felt

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 Sep 2002 · 9 comments

Have you ever felt the rush that comes as the plunger begins its long slow journey, feeding ungodly orgasmic ecstaty to your veins? Ever felt the burning as the line on the mirror vanishes up the straw buried deep in your nose, as your brain SCREAMS through the day at a thousand miles an hour? Ever felt the cold steel of a forty-five pressed firmly behind your ear, sweat pouring, stinking of fear afraid the finger on the trigger might twitch too hard?

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9 comments

[8] Tarquin De La Bog 10-Sep-02/11:31 AM Reply

I like this. 8. The drug references are risque (have you ever noticed that people shy away from commenting on poems alluding to drugs?) but nicely done, and the final section ends the poem succinctly. The short lines add atmosphere to the piece. I'm impressed.

[2] poetandknowit 10-Sep-02/11:10 PM Reply

Oh I am afraid to comment because this poem is about drugs. Of it is risqu??. Jesus, Tar bog where do you live where they have that sort of fear. Well any, my problem is not with the subject but the fact that the poem is trite and one long rhetorical question. What are you trying to get at by asking the reader something? Especially when most readers will go, gee, no, why? Am I not hip enough?

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › poetandknowit 11-Sep-02/7:12 AM Reply

T. de la Bog, I have come to realise, is not a human but a commenting robot, whose ability to comment comes from a basic syntactic parser and 20 years sitting in his mother's high school poetry class.

[6] Christof 11-Sep-02/5:47 AM Reply

Also that capitalised SCREAMS is jarring rather than exciting. And have you ever felt this stuff?

[7] PawnedTidal 11-Sep-02/6:36 AM Reply

I have now. 7.

[4] Amelia 11-Sep-02/1:09 PM Reply

Sheesh!

[7] daniella 21-Oct-02/6:30 AM Reply

you hang with snipers? you might find good company. this is eery whiteman's talk..

[0] -=SeTTle=- 24-Nov-02/11:39 AM Reply

OBVIOUSLY YOU HAVEN'T

[7] nentwined 17-Dec-02/11:19 AM Reply

interesting. I'd like these three images to be more intertwined, somehow. 7