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The Sky (Other) by jauser
The sky is wide The sky is high Up on the black sky Sometimes cloudy Sometimes clear Sometimes have a picture of a deer Which is pretty lame The sky filled with many memories Memories of everybody Those who having a bad day Could just look up the sky And will feel high Like when just finish smoking weed Sometimes the sky can be scary Like when it thunder It make you wonder Of how deep is the water Out on the sea Out in the river Sometimes in the bowl That you just pee in, hehe The sky is best pretty When it's fill with star Star that form into a car A Honda, a Ford About $70,000 Too much no one can afford The sky can be a door To another world A fantasy world- Sometimes it open To an ugly ass world Where people get rape And before the invention of Scotch tape But all I wants you to know Is how you, yourself feel When you look up in the sky How would you feel When a dog bite When a open your leg wide I guess you don't Understand what I am talking About, but someday Someday, you will...

Up the ladder: step away
Down the ladder: Ever Felt

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0555553
Weighted score: 5.052921
Overall Rank: 6816
Posted: October 4, 2002 5:25 PM PDT; Last modified: October 4, 2002 5:37 PM PDT
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Comments:
[1] Dark Angle @ 172.191.4.158 | 5-Oct-02/1:06 AM | Reply
hmm, will i? who are you to say? i dont think i will so there!!!
[n/a] jauser @ 199.182.59.146 > Dark Angle | 5-Oct-02/8:55 AM | Reply
what the hell are you talking about? acertaincontempt
[1] Dark Angle @ 205.186.145.13 > jauser | 6-Oct-02/1:43 AM | Reply
I guess you don't
Understand what I am talking
About, but someday
Someday, you will...


well in that part of the poem, you say the reader will understand, but i dont think i will, sorry. i wish i could, but this poem is too fucking out there for me man. sorry, i guess im not up to par on your plane of existence or something, oh well.
[n/a] jauser @ 204.30.199.136 > Dark Angle | 6-Oct-02/2:09 PM | Reply
Lol by the way, you hab good poem going on
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 7-Oct-02/6:59 PM | Reply
Ace, bum boy!!!!!!!!!!!11111111
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Jan-03/9:48 PM | Reply
So far this is the winner, don't ask me why, but it's loose and accurate to be sure..not to mention..simple and well written in a complicated fashion...i liked it alot. 10!!
[n/a] jauser @ 207.220.136.163 > horus8 | 31-Mar-03/5:58 PM | Reply
THANK YOU,,, VERRY VERRY MUCh man, thank you again, no one have appreciate it. i quit this a lil but now imma start writing poem again. u have push me far from where i stand. AHHAHAHA
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