on A Meadow, Among Other Things by Enkidu
29 Sep 2005, 9:45 PM
I can't say I entirely get whats going on here, but it has me intrigued enough to read it when I'm dully awake.
on A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina
29 Sep 2005, 9:40 PM
too much wisdom for his age...mmmhhmmmm....it's like they're just popping out knowing everything these days.
I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.
I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.
replying on Leaving Song by wilco
14 Sep 2005, 3:14 PM
That's the idea
replying on My addict by Heather Dee
13 Sep 2005, 8:32 PM
Actually it comes pretty close to rhyimg if your from the south...down here it's mirr.
on to all of you by Heather Dee
13 Sep 2005, 8:03 PM
That's the idea. Don't give a fuck....
about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying.
The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...).
I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem.
Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying.
The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...).
I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem.
Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
on the birds are bugs by ay deee
13 Sep 2005, 7:56 PM
Locusts do suck. I do, however, think that a much better job could be do of saying that here...
replying on Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly
13 Sep 2005, 7:35 PM
I'd probably give this a 9, that done.
on Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly
13 Sep 2005, 7:30 PM
Baxter, you know I don't speak Spanish.
Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.
Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.
on Artemis and the Rain by MacFrantic
13 Sep 2005, 6:51 PM
Your poems always give me a headache.
replying on Rejuvenation by Dovina
8 Sep 2005, 1:08 PM
I'll be in Memphis..I try to stay away from Dyersburg as much as possible...but hey, stay away from Chequers...that place is crusty in the worst way.
on God-Damn Love by D. $ Fontera
8 Sep 2005, 12:54 PM
How is it that you can write something good ("Falling") and then post this foolishness. The Drive-By Truckers' "God Damn Lonely Love" is much better...check that out.
on modern death(Debuffeted) by Crakyamuni
8 Sep 2005, 12:50 PM
mm...I liked the last line better before...