Re: A Meadow, Among Other Things by Enkidu	29-Sep-05/9:45 PM
I can't say I entirely get whats going on here, but it has me intrigued enough to read it when I'm dully awake.
Re: pep talk by ay deee	29-Sep-05/9:43 PM
I'd lose everything after rich red thread and maybe everything after hairy shirt.
Re: A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina	29-Sep-05/9:40 PM
too much wisdom for his age...mmmhhmmmm....it's like they're just popping out knowing everything these days. I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.
Re: a comment on Leaving Song by wilco	14-Sep-05/3:14 PM
That's the idea
Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	14-Sep-05/3:12 PM
Good riddance to bad rubbish...the club, I mean, not the poem...the poem was quite good...but I understand <sniff>.
Re: Seekers by Dovina	14-Sep-05/3:06 PM
I'd love to see you post that one from a while back...I don't remember what it was called but it was really good...something about being in fashion...I don't know....get on that, though ok?
Re: Creation by Quarton	14-Sep-05/3:03 PM
eventually This seems more like a science textbook put to rhyme than a poem...give it some feeling.
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	13-Sep-05/8:32 PM
Actually it comes pretty close to rhyimg if your from the south...down here it's mirr.
Re: to all of you by Heather Dee	13-Sep-05/8:03 PM
That's the idea. Don't give a fuck.... about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying. The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...). I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem. Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
Re: the birds are bugs by ay deee	13-Sep-05/7:56 PM
Locusts do suck. I do, however, think that a much better job could be do of saying that here...
Re: a comment on Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:35 PM
I'd probably give this a 9, that done.
Re: August by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:33 PM
mmm...not as good as the first one I read...not terrible, just doesn't make me jump up and say halle-fucking-luja (which really wouldn't be that hard right now cause I've got an 18 pack of High Life and the George Strait Box Set.
Re: June by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:31 PM
Once again, you could probably say this in about half the lines and it's actually be more effective.
Re: Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:30 PM
Baxter, you know I don't speak Spanish. Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.
Re: Artemis and the Rain by MacFrantic	13-Sep-05/6:51 PM
Your poems always give me a headache.
Re: keys by ay deee	8-Sep-05/1:10 PM
Oooo! Oooo! You're a janitor! I love this game...
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	8-Sep-05/1:08 PM
I'll be in Memphis..I try to stay away from Dyersburg as much as possible...but hey, stay away from Chequers...that place is crusty in the worst way.
Re: Stardust by TLRufener	8-Sep-05/1:03 PM
And for a second I thought it was Willie..but alas, no. There's just nothing original here...please see my comment on...umm, one of the poems by Heather Dee as it applies here as well.
Re: God-Damn Love by D. $ Fontera	8-Sep-05/12:54 PM
How is it that you can write something good ("Falling") and then post this foolishness. The Drive-By Truckers' "God Damn Lonely Love" is much better...check that out.
Re: modern death(Debuffeted) by Crakyamuni	8-Sep-05/12:50 PM
mm...I liked the last line better before...