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pep talk (Free verse) by ay deee
settle down now we've got to get this done there ain't a thing scarier than a man with a gun wearin' a hairy shirt where efficiency meets the streets we'll be elegantly snug among shares of boot tread and rich red thread stitch me up captain slap hands and act younger shit i've got a helluva hunger platters of pinpoint accurate blood splatter brick clatter glass shatter batter deep fried on a bed of green jacket tattered i wish this fight mattered but i'll keep my piece clean as long as the feelin's right and the wage is green

Up the ladder: reflection
Down the ladder: Who is it for anyway?

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1666665
Weighted score: 5.313765
Overall Rank: 3576
Posted: September 28, 2005 4:49 PM PDT; Last modified: September 28, 2005 4:49 PM PDT
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[10] zodiac @ 194.165.132.226 | 29-Sep-05/5:58 AM | Reply
Good up to and including the hairy shirt.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > zodiac | 5-Oct-05/3:36 PM | Reply
what's so good about up to and including hairy shirt?
what's so bad about the rest?
[10] zodiac @ 86.108.9.28 > ay deee | 7-Oct-05/7:11 AM | Reply
I dunno. Hairy shirt's just a good image.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > zodiac | 9-Oct-05/11:09 AM | Reply
thank you; it's like a self-inflicted cause
you know, a hair shirt worn by someone with something to prove
a discomfort for its own sake
but i still don't understand what is lacking in the rest of the poem...
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 | 29-Sep-05/9:05 AM | Reply
Good one you god damn mercenary.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > ALChemy | 5-Oct-05/3:36 PM | Reply
thank you kindly.
[7] wilco @ 66.61.101.130 | 29-Sep-05/9:43 PM | Reply
I'd lose everything after rich red thread and maybe everything after hairy shirt.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > wilco | 5-Oct-05/3:37 PM | Reply
if you lost it, where would you find it, and what would you do to fill the void created by it's absence?
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