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Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines (Free verse) by Muffinly I am fiction
Undermining
Because it was the truth
It had to be fabricated
Bill never knew (and George sure doesn't)
But I do
I am fiction
And I can see through the smoke
Will it take eleven years
to feel a million lives?
Don't you see we're dying here?
I don't think you do
I can see through the red, and past the blue
But I still don't see you
Up the ladder:
"Blood Stained Tears"
Down the ladder:
Home is Where the Hate Is
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Posted: September 13, 2005 2:16 PM PDT; Last modified: September 13, 2005 2:16 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.905148 Overall Rank: 9738 Comments:
Im going to put up a revised version... and I'm working on a second part too.
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Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.