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Seekers (Free verse) by Dovina A tree with crocked branches
brushes gently on stucco,
the rough siding of a church,
suggesting to the church
how differently
men and nature seek.
While nature trembles over herself
or stretches awkwardly, asymmetricallyâ
yearning, adjusting,
our houses stand measured and precise,
our concepts bold and plum
our utterances contained within walls.
Up the ladder:
Exodus of Babylon
Down the ladder:
Never Ending Cycle
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Posted: September 14, 2005 3:00 PM PDT; Last modified: September 14, 2005 3:00 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9284782 Overall Rank: 9372 Comments:
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wilco @ 66.61.101.130
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14-Sep-05/3:06 PM
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I'd love to see you post that one from a while back...I don't remember what it was called but it was really good...something about being in fashion...I don't know....get on that, though ok?
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Dovina @ 24.52.236.153
> wilco
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14-Sep-05/3:09 PM
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Oh, that was too far back if you know what I mean. BTW, you're more right than you may know about Chequers - only a vacant store front across Main Street on the east side of the courthouse.
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wilco @ 66.61.101.130
> Dovina
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14-Sep-05/3:12 PM
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Good riddance to bad rubbish...the club, I mean, not the poem...the poem was quite good...but I understand <sniff>.
you dont need asymettrically its too effucsive with it but i like the comparisons of natures shape to our own.
Is the church both siding and stucco? How hideous. I suppose you'll say, religion usually is.
No, I only meant that the church is flat and erect.
What the hell? Are you pulling my leg?
No, its wall is stucco, flat and plum.
1) Where does the siding in the poem come from. At least in the South, siding is an actual material made from wood or more commonly plastic, and not just "the side of something", as you seem to have it.
2) What distinction are you making between flat and plum in the comment above? (PS-Congratulations on bringing plum back into the mix! Good one!)
Unlike a mouth plum, plum here describes a vertical surface, the side of a church. The tree with its irregular shape seems to say to the church, "Why are you so square and rigid compared to us natural things?"
Ironically nature is usually the inspiration for building designs.
Besides if man is part of nature shouldn't manmade objects be. Aren't beaver damns part of nature. I think mankind tries to make itself more special than it is.
Beaver dams are much more random-looking tham people dams. We can't seem to get the nack of flowing with the moment.
They're not random to the beavers.
PS: Thanks for not pointing out I misspelled dam. That's pathetic even by my dyslexic standards.
Surely beavers don't look for randomness or design in dams or much of anything else. Yes, if you asked a beaver what it thought about its dam, it'd probably rock back on its heels a bit and say something like 'Yep, looks good to me.' But if he did, you'd probably want to get your head checked.
Really? I thought they pre-selected trees to munch down that would spell -Crawl- when they were finished.
Certainly there's some sense of structural design in the dams.
I'm just saying maybe George Carlin is right. Maybe our major purpose for being on earth is to make plastic. Because the earth couldn't do it on its own. Doesn't that still make us part of the natural process. Just a bunch of eager beavers cutting down trees, building dams, trying to control the earth.
Actually I just like talking about beavers.
Makes me think of pussies. The Kitty cat kind you perves. They both make a really tasty hair pie.
Talking about human beings' purpose so much here is giving me epilepsy. Pppleassse evvverrrybooddy stopppppp.
The Erie Canal, built in 1817-1825 was designed much like a beaver would. Without professional engineers, people with practical sense and determination built 400 miles of canal, with locks and aquaducts, an amazing feat even for today's technology. I wonder if the tree in my poem looks at today's structures and asks how they are better.
It's probably just hoping no beavers come by and start chewing on it.
It's not there any more, except for remnants. It's been rebuilt twice, and the present Erie Canal is angular and technically correct. Beavers have no chance.
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