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the birds are bugs (Free verse) by ay deee i like this back yard
i said
glancing from the fire to the overhead
oaks and pine
but
all night
these birds
one in that tree
and usually on in the tree over there
its farther away tonight
than usual
they just go back and forth
i said to john
and later to ezra
i think those are bugs man
no way
yeah
lauren agreed
in fact
knew
that those birds
are bugs
they have like a
violiny sound to them
like wings on wings
like big crickets
that's why swarms are so bad
yall don't get broods in
nebraska?
no way
those are some damn loud bugs
yeah
some big bugs
we get grasshoppers
wait til the locusts come out
Up the ladder:
Ceylon Cries
Down the ladder:
thinking while sawin' a few logs
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Posted: September 12, 2005 9:59 PM PDT; Last modified: September 12, 2005 9:59 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.833116 Overall Rank: 10799 Comments:
use some punctuation and some editing clean it up and i might even like it maybe because it is a peak into a neat thing that happened or at least it seems like that i wondered if it was about cicadas but maybe you are talking about some other bug i cant believe you thought they were birds anyway work on this poem because as you should be able to tell by now without punctuation it makes things hard to read and interpret.
i mostly like to give peeks into neat things
they are cicadas but i'm not from around here the lack of punctuation is an aesthetic choice i would prompt another read if you are troubled by it and yes there are many and varied interpretations it just a peek of sorts
and thank you for your vote
Locusts do suck. I do, however, think that a much better job could be do of saying that here...
more specific suggestions are always welcome
but thank you for your vote 181 view(s)
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violiny sound to them"-?
Y'all not yall.
voiliny sound to them"
a qoute
yalls dont worry bout that