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the birds are bugs (Free verse) by ay deee

i like this back yard i said glancing from the fire to the overhead oaks and pine but all night these birds one in that tree and usually on in the tree over there its farther away tonight than usual they just go back and forth i said to john and later to ezra i think those are bugs man no way yeah lauren agreed in fact knew that those birds are bugs they have like a violiny sound to them like wings on wings like big crickets that's why swarms are so bad yall don't get broods in nebraska? no way those are some damn loud bugs yeah some big bugs we get grasshoppers wait til the locusts come out

LilMsLadyPoet 13-Sep-05/12:06 PM
use some punctuation and some editing clean it up and i might even like it maybe because it is a peak into a neat thing that happened or at least it seems like that i wondered if it was about cicadas but maybe you are talking about some other bug i cant believe you thought they were birds anyway work on this poem because as you should be able to tell by now without punctuation it makes things hard to read and interpret.




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