| Re: Memories by RION12 |
8-Mar-05/9:25 PM |
What memories?
Peeing in the kiddie pool while everyone was watching?
Or was it the episode of 7th heaven that changed your life?
Grow up and learn to use grammar correctly.
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| Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL |
8-Mar-05/9:20 PM |
RION12
Q.If these "bitches" don't know anything about you,
nor do you care about them, nor do they have the
irrelevant ability to do things that you can do,
nor can they say shit to you, and you care more
about their ability to perform oral sex on a man
than the poem itself, then why comment?
A. you're a douchebag, and this poem is very
original and very good.
*10*
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| Re: ...on the Benefits of Being Ugly by Goad |
5-Mar-05/8:59 PM |
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| Re: Dustin(Incomplete) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
19-Feb-05/9:41 AM |
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Hey! That name is my own, without the whole (incomplete) deal.
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| Re: The Critical and His Horse by MacFrantic |
19-Feb-05/12:31 AM |
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| Re: The Man I Love by Dovina |
13-Feb-05/9:01 PM |
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| Re: Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man by Enkidu |
13-Feb-05/9:52 AM |
Ah, middle-eastern inspiration. I can't believe people failed to get this.
-Enkidu
-D. $ Fontera
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| Re: Insanity by Lifeboatman |
13-Feb-05/9:48 AM |
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| Re: broken pieces of a candy heart by brazen |
13-Feb-05/9:47 AM |
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Wow, single stanzas are ruling write now. In this, it happens to be the last. *7*
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| Re: Starless by MacFrantic |
13-Feb-05/9:45 AM |
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There really should be more werewolf poems.
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| Re: a comment on Starless by MacFrantic |
13-Feb-05/9:44 AM |
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And 200 years ago, I'd have not been born to see you do so.
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| Re: Bridesmaids in the Rain by wilco |
12-Feb-05/8:25 PM |
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so good, very nice picture. *9*
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| Re: Prayer of Forgiveness by Dovina |
12-Feb-05/7:45 PM |
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definitely needs a line that stands out. *7*
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| Re: CUPID by al-naafiysh |
12-Feb-05/7:42 PM |
Man, that was such an entertaining poem! Little changes here and there-I won't be specific- and it's perfect! *10*
Can you put a single stanza in your "favorites" section?
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| Re: Orion takes aim by oneglove |
12-Feb-05/7:39 PM |
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Oh, please get rid of L4. *7*
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| Re: My Angel by jroday |
12-Feb-05/7:38 PM |
Interesting venture.
The structure could use some work.
*6*
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| Re: Kiss of a rose by backstreetdreamer |
12-Feb-05/7:35 PM |
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Why not just call it "The Name of the Rose" *5*
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| Re: Blood and roses. by backstreetdreamer |
12-Feb-05/7:34 PM |
I can't believe I'm saying this, but if this had actually been a prose poem, I might have given it a higher score. And don't use "evermore" ever or more.
*8*
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| Re: dot.com by PodPoet |
12-Feb-05/7:31 PM |
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3 dot.coms send the message. *4*
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| Re: Dreamtigers (Borges) by Sasha |
12-Feb-05/7:29 PM |
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Only major problem- other than the whole "prose" thing-is the large space near the end. Find some way to fix it. *7* (I automatically deduct 1 point for prose, sorry)
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