| Re: a comment on A Vernal Tale by MacFrantic |
18-Nov-07/3:13 PM |
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Thanks, that was very helpful.
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| Re: from Me to you by Alex Green |
1-Sep-07/5:47 PM |
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This is my favorite of your songs. Very good madam, very good.
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| Re: Stuck in Re-Verse by Alex Green |
20-Aug-07/11:00 AM |
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If only these douchebags could hear you sing, Mel.
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| Re: a comment on On and On and On by MacFrantic |
11-Jul-07/11:33 AM |
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Spot on Dovina, you've also aced the reason for the length, but I've never written an undiscplined rant in my life...most mistakes are deliberate and if it's annoying, I'm usually embellishing.
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| Re: a comment on Tirade of a Venetian Ghost by MacFrantic |
22-Jun-07/11:56 PM |
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The title refers to Shakespeare as he wrote much about Venice.
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| Re: a comment on Time Imperfect by MacFrantic |
7-Jun-07/12:27 AM |
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| Re: Drowning by wilco |
1-Feb-07/8:00 PM |
Hey! I have a poem with the same title. But this is totally different, and enjoyable. Well written, in fact. Loved "So Iâll just wrap myself in another cliché
of cheap bourbon and unlit cigarettes."
Also, S3's "your" should be "you're"
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| Re: Me by berdabear |
1-Feb-07/7:56 PM |
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Wonderful confession from 7th grader to 7th grader. Bravo!
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| Re: i am probably on my 7th shot of vodka by tralala42001 |
1-Feb-07/7:55 PM |
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ugh...not your best. if you had read this, you probably would have made it more interesting in revision. if you did read it...why didn't you delete it?
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| Re: i don't recall the last 8 minutes by tralala42001 |
1-Feb-07/7:52 PM |
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the first two lines are kind of useless. However, it winds down well.
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| Re: Weep In Me by blueyes |
1-Feb-07/7:51 PM |
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I like the last stanza, but isn't subtle enough.
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| Re: The Crossing by Hillarystep |
1-Feb-07/7:49 PM |
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Apart from how showy and verbose this poem is, it is EXTREMELY well written and re-readable.
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| Re: Pre Dance Jitters by Butterflywriter |
1-Feb-07/7:47 PM |
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Could be better. I'm really not a fan of this simplistic image structure that takes so many lines to say very little.
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| Re: He doesn't love me by tuthaliash |
1-Feb-07/7:44 PM |
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This is perfectly concise. Good suicide note.
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| Re: Coming Back by x311 |
1-Feb-07/7:40 PM |
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This poem seems to echo delusion throughout. I hope that was your intent, if not...this isn't very good.
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| Re: Tunnel Vision by x311 |
1-Feb-07/7:39 PM |
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the lack of definition is a little irksome, but aside from that, the tone is clear. I liked it.
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| Re: a comment on Stream of Consciousness (#2) by MacFrantic |
31-Jan-07/10:10 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Darkroom Dancer by MacFrantic |
31-Jan-07/10:07 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Darkroom Dancer by MacFrantic |
31-Jan-07/10:07 AM |
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| Re: a comment on New Year by wilco |
13-Jan-07/11:27 AM |
oh, and patty could use about 5 minutes to stop taking everything so seriously.
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