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i am probably on my 7th shot of vodka (Free verse) by tralala42001
it is the time in which everyone rests their bodies and only the insane are awake it is the time when the drunks begin to pass out on the curb or with their next object of instant gratification it is the time in which i awaken with a comforting touch on my breast

Up the ladder: Man Enough For Me
Down the ladder: His Light

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2
Weighted score: 4.904638
Overall Rank: 9841
Posted: January 10, 2004 1:39 PM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2004 1:39 PM PST
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[8] richa @ 81.178.214.114 | 11-Jan-04/12:13 PM | Reply
Not bad this, a bit short. Not enough for me to know what you mean by 'comforting touch on my breast' - is it sarcastic? I'm thinking so or do you like strangers? they are a stranger right?
[3] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54 | 11-Jan-04/12:18 PM | Reply
ha ha ha ha lol. This is some retarded whore shit right here. You're probably on your 7th cock sandwich too. it is the time to see the gynocologist fucking bivulvanating trollip. lol. I'll give a three for making me chuckle though. You've obviously never been to the big city doll. they do this 24-7, it's always the time. This sounds like some shit my rank mother would write before squatting on a donkey for a line of coke.
[4] MacFrantic @ 129.82.152.112 | 1-Feb-07/7:55 PM | Reply
ugh...not your best. if you had read this, you probably would have made it more interesting in revision. if you did read it...why didn't you delete it?
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