| Re: Memories Of Home by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Aug-06/12:21 AM |
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| Re: Chickens by rnuk |
14-Aug-06/1:34 AM |
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This is incredible, I absolutely adore it!
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| Re: A Tragic Love Tryst In The Park Near The Sewage Works by Edna Sweetlove |
19-Aug-06/10:47 AM |
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This is one of the funniest things i have ever read, and that a fantastic accomplishment. i can only give you a ten, but i wish i could give you more, if you know what i mean...
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| Re: The Beach by Evening |
30-Nov-06/12:41 PM |
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This has some good imagery, but the punctuation was lazy and it sounds like it should be shorter.
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| Re: soft candy by skaskowski |
25-Dec-06/10:49 AM |
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I loved this before and it's still good revised.
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6-Jan-07/11:45 PM |
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this is really good. it doesn't have anything particularly memorable...it's just solid. i love it. 10
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| Re: New Year by wilco |
13-Jan-07/10:18 AM |
I love that people are taking themselves so seriously. I haven't been commenting at all because I've just been using this site as an archive, but damn! Is there something going around running up peoples' asses or what? I absolutely love the sarcasm and the synthetic wit. I flaunt my vocabulary as much as the next person, but hey! Nobody talks like this. Good luck on all future ventures you guys, and I hope you'll find someone to give you that hug you so desperately need.
P.S. Best poem I've ever read. *5*
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| Re: Tunnel Vision by x311 |
1-Feb-07/7:39 PM |
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the lack of definition is a little irksome, but aside from that, the tone is clear. I liked it.
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| Re: Coming Back by x311 |
1-Feb-07/7:40 PM |
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This poem seems to echo delusion throughout. I hope that was your intent, if not...this isn't very good.
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| Re: He doesn't love me by tuthaliash |
1-Feb-07/7:44 PM |
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This is perfectly concise. Good suicide note.
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| Re: Pre Dance Jitters by Butterflywriter |
1-Feb-07/7:47 PM |
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Could be better. I'm really not a fan of this simplistic image structure that takes so many lines to say very little.
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| Re: The Crossing by Hillarystep |
1-Feb-07/7:49 PM |
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Apart from how showy and verbose this poem is, it is EXTREMELY well written and re-readable.
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| Re: Weep In Me by blueyes |
1-Feb-07/7:51 PM |
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I like the last stanza, but isn't subtle enough.
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| Re: i don't recall the last 8 minutes by tralala42001 |
1-Feb-07/7:52 PM |
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the first two lines are kind of useless. However, it winds down well.
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| Re: i am probably on my 7th shot of vodka by tralala42001 |
1-Feb-07/7:55 PM |
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ugh...not your best. if you had read this, you probably would have made it more interesting in revision. if you did read it...why didn't you delete it?
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| Re: Me by berdabear |
1-Feb-07/7:56 PM |
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Wonderful confession from 7th grader to 7th grader. Bravo!
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| Re: Drowning by wilco |
1-Feb-07/8:00 PM |
Hey! I have a poem with the same title. But this is totally different, and enjoyable. Well written, in fact. Loved "So Iâll just wrap myself in another cliché
of cheap bourbon and unlit cigarettes."
Also, S3's "your" should be "you're"
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Feb-07/8:02 PM |
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Not many poems on this subject. You get Windows Vista yet , Rock?
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| Re: Stuck in Re-Verse by Alex Green |
20-Aug-07/11:00 AM |
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If only these douchebags could hear you sing, Mel.
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| Re: from Me to you by Alex Green |
1-Sep-07/5:47 PM |
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This is my favorite of your songs. Very good madam, very good.
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