on You tell me by Ariella
31 Dec 2003, 10:43 PM
peppered with error - and it needs salt.
on advice to innovators by (m)ee cummings by irishfolksuicide
31 Dec 2003, 10:39 PM
She mite, then she mite not, though if she tried with all her mite, she mite - but only if she had the rite foresite to make it at the rite time in spite of [that other guy]'s rite to smite the mite, am I rite? Not quite.
on How to spend New Years in denial by Bachus
31 Dec 2003, 10:29 PM
bummer dude, bummer.
on Santa’s Journal 25thDec2003 by ShaNoN+960317485
29 Dec 2003, 4:55 AM
"quelling giggles" - nice
on Beauty Sleep by Blindpoetry
28 Dec 2003, 6:45 PM
somehow - sad.
on Add More Oil by heartlessempath
28 Dec 2003, 6:43 PM
I like this talk of a girl in water, with oil.
and I like the poem - I want to give it a nine.
so, I will.
and I like the poem - I want to give it a nine.
so, I will.
on I cant stand you by sk8rs_rule_all
28 Dec 2003, 6:39 PM
"You make me mad
when i should be glad."
"Just die aready,
i wont cry
i'll laugh.
I'll be glad,
and no longer mad!!!"
classic pimple.
when i should be glad."
"Just die aready,
i wont cry
i'll laugh.
I'll be glad,
and no longer mad!!!"
classic pimple.
replying on Lenola prays with a stiletto by SupremeDreamer
28 Dec 2003, 6:17 PM
(persons, places or things)
stiletto s2, stiletto s7
rosary s2, rosary s4.
stiletto s2, stiletto s7
rosary s2, rosary s4.
on We Are Still Friends by Blindpoetry
27 Dec 2003, 10:02 PM
yep. thats a pimple alright.
good ending.
good ending.
on Lenola prays with a stiletto by SupremeDreamer
27 Dec 2003, 10:01 PM
I liked "and well-thumbed rosary" but not the repeated noun. Same with stiletto.
I like the characterization lots, you know, that you gave her a name.
I like the characterization lots, you know, that you gave her a name.
on Live for Die for by firestorm998
27 Dec 2003, 9:58 PM
Certainly a nice idea - but the execution... Despite Richa's [everpresent] sour tone, I agree with him.
replying on 12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
21 Dec 2003, 5:54 AM
Well - as long as your mother stays...
;O)
;O)
replying on 12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
20 Dec 2003, 8:27 PM
Okay - what the hell, I'm a member. Just joined a contest.
replying on 12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
20 Dec 2003, 8:04 PM
I think I've been there, it's not part of my "rounds" - any good?
on 12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
20 Dec 2003, 7:04 PM
Yep. It put me in the moment.
Somehow I found myself trying to think of a different last line. I don't know if it was me enjoying the aftertaste; imagining possibilities/extending the vision - or a hunger pain.
Did you try other ones?
Somehow I found myself trying to think of a different last line. I don't know if it was me enjoying the aftertaste; imagining possibilities/extending the vision - or a hunger pain.
Did you try other ones?
on Mixed Feelings by PunkyPanda
20 Dec 2003, 6:55 PM
i'd like to see the sentiment without any attemps at making it rhyme.
on I Love You by Blindpoetry
20 Dec 2003, 6:53 PM
I don't know, spence...
I doesn't say much more that what's said in the title alone.
I doesn't say much more that what's said in the title alone.
on All the rain has fallen by fair12
17 Dec 2003, 12:08 PM
winter as a loss of reason - love it.
I like the refrain - you shall have a snowman (8)