Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing	27-Jan-04/6:50 AM
I like that it is a non-typical angle on the life of a tree; futility rather than growth and life (the same thing, perhaps). What about changing the last "trees" to a specific kind of trees? Don't do willow - too "done". Alternatively, maybe a specific *part* of a tree (trunks, roots, branches...). anyway, I like what you have, more so for the different perspective.
Re: Dry Beast Night by fevriere	27-Jan-04/6:41 AM
interesting rhymes and near-word reflections. It struck me (not harshly) more as an exercise, albeit a good one, rather than a poem that can stand on its own; a little too much of one trick in the pony-beast. Having said all that - this beast is a sestina fer crying out loud, and one of the more cogent ones I've read in a while so; huge kudos for that. Nice job.
Re: Are You O.K.? by sonawrote	27-Jan-04/6:31 AM
I think it would be a grand percent better without the "without delay" - as it is, its fairly good and I can see it working very well at a poetry reading.
Re: a comment on Kittens and Pocket Money by Shuushin	27-Jan-04/4:04 AM
Thank you - glad for that!
Re: The back of a shovel? by horus8	17-Jan-04/5:39 PM
"Then..." I think? good one.
Re: a comment on Love is Like a Rose by justjay	17-Jan-04/1:36 PM
Actually, I thought it was the twist of a blade and the warmth of blood running down one's wrist, collecting at the elbow, then streaming off.
Re: Skull Soup v.2 by SupremeDreamer	15-Jan-04/1:39 PM
I like it, with one small exception - okay two, but the second is more general. The first stanza - mixed metaphor, I think you can fix it with removing the last three lines (and still completely retain the meaning). It may be my taste, but I kept feeling like strings of words could be removed here and there, maybe 2,3 words in a row - to make the remainder more rich.
Re: War zone by INTRANSIT	15-Jan-04/1:35 PM
Was there a preposition sale someplace I missed? Cute story.
Re: O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	13-Jan-04/1:51 PM
"with the voices of owls" nice.
Re: Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}>	11-Jan-04/12:40 PM
Bling bling prose, I like angle with the parenthetical sober commentary.
Re: Acrylic Sunrise by MacFrantic	8-Jan-04/2:01 PM
Love the title lots. The litany of basic color names didn't quite work for me though. If it wasn't fairly similar in structure to something I just wrote, I might like it more (I've been in a "sky" phase).
Re: a comment on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/8:31 AM
I think you can just delete it call it a day.
Re: Waiting to inhale (Stardust & God's Black Nostril) by Don-Quixote	7-Jan-04/8:23 AM
I dunno, religion is tough to pick on with a straight face anymore. Kindof like bitch-slapping someone with a learning disability for not knowing linear math; tough to tell who's more retarded. To do it in a non-informative way - without explanation, is adopting the same philosophies that a believer relies on. Not that I don't do the same damn thing. That having been said, I find this entertaining enough to give it a yellowed snowman (courtesy of SupremeDreamer).
Re: Last flight of a goose by Bobjim	7-Jan-04/8:04 AM
more.
Re: BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	7-Jan-04/8:01 AM
I like how you suckered me into the rythm of it - but I could do without the last line.
Re: Dance in my Golden Shower by SupremeDreamer	7-Jan-04/7:58 AM
gross. having the spinach and the vitamin first was just plain evil.
Re: The wise by richa	4-Jan-04/7:28 PM
nice one Richa - I like the concept of a waning grasp lots.
Re: Haikus for Nentwined by horus8	3-Jan-04/6:10 AM
a ten in the hopes we may be blessed with his holy presence.
Re: A stitch by EAger to Offend	2-Jan-04/6:28 PM
some conjuringing? a curse? Have a snowman; eat his nose.
Re: a comment on A stitch by EAger to Offend	2-Jan-04/6:24 PM
oo oo - I just wrote this (like a week ago)! <A Chemical Story> Neurotransmitting friends: my dynorphin, beta endorphin and enkephalins. Throughout the holidays, helping me; reacting to the call of substance (P), keeping me free of Marley’s chains, and various stress-induced pains. There’s been many a party enjoyed through my endogenous opioids; from mu (both things 1 and 2) to epsilon (they’ll visit with you from dusk till dawn). They’re as dear as a table of Tiny Tims; I love them each drug as a son - God bless the little endorphins, every one.