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Acrylic Sunrise (Free verse) by MacFrantic
I'll step into the dusk and wait for hours
Flaunting midnight blues and grays
Waiting for a yellowed moonbeam to appear
The white breeze feels cooler tonight
Although the violet skies exhibit summer
Dawn has gone again in a flurry of silver
Burning rouge about the open airs
A flash of pink and orange ignites the early morning
My tired mind wanders in a body splashed with gold
To rest on a bed of amber hazel leaves
Sleeping upon this vibrant ray of sun
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.0715218
Overall Rank: 6612
Posted: January 8, 2004 11:51 AM PST; Last modified: January 8, 2004 11:51 AM PST
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The litany of basic color names didn't quite work for me though. If it wasn't fairly similar in structure to something I just wrote, I might like it more (I've been in a "sky" phase).