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Waiting to inhale (Stardust & God's Black Nostril) (Free verse) by Don-Quixote Night stars torture god;
eternity demands narcotics
during the andante season.
Coke scattered across the universe,
and he stifles a nasal sniffle-
because once he starts
the whole stash must be sucked
into his black nostril.
The pope prays
"Reject Jesus; accept dope into your heart
and shut the fuck up- listening to you
is like choking on moldered sushi."
Sheep huddle together and beg forgiveness
"Knew I'd regret firing Jesus.. Its time to make more
wolves, and finish up the Wool Plague."
Somewhere in Israel, God speaks to man once again
"False prophets and crucifixion... Its time to pull off my
favorite cosmic joke before pushing the big red button
labelled -Armageddon- and snorting the universal rail."
A Lamb prays alone in the moonlight
"You'll sleep sound once my new wolves bleed you dry
and paint scarlet clouds."
Its been ages since he first told the joke,
but now humans have long ceased to be funny;
Humanity is just his slow dying mutt-
fleas have been drinking since barbecued ribs
and fresh baked apple pie.
"Who else would have inspired me to create opium and
marijuana? And ofcourse, my bestseller: religion!"
Up the ladder:
The bearded space merchant from lil Idaho
Down the ladder:
Thoughts
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Posted: January 7, 2004 3:14 AM PST; Last modified: January 7, 2004 8:23 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7690 Comments:
First of all, I know very little about drugs, how to "do" them and what the factors are involving such. So some of this poem loses me. But that's my lack of knowledge, not your poem. Moldy crackers should go, I think. Disneys' Aladdin popped into my head. Assuming (andante) is referring to winter, I love it. Had to look up the word though. I love the fleas, wool plaugue, and scarlet clouds. Over all I think it's fine as it sits. neener neener neener.
Well, let me clear up your drug confusion:
Coke is snorted, and a rail is a long line of coke usually snorted with a straw or a dollar bill. (did that help?) Ah.. Aladdin.. yes, I know exactly what your saying- Its gone and being reworked. (think adding a parrot would be going too far?) well, andante, winter, or "slow-season" (yeah, im still experimenting with webster'n friends.)
something something ashes might be a good replacement. andante is an excellent call.
er.. missed that.. well, what do you think of the moldered sushi? (ashes.. cremated roadkill?..hrmm.)
no. soldered sushi.
soldered? (metal sushi? not sure that fits.. perhaps "melded"?)
Sushi is not actually raw fish, it is lightly fried in vinegar. As such, I give you -1- cos the rest of the poem is an affront to my beliefs.
lol. Its ok, I know. Thats why it doesn't matter. :)
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To do it in a non-informative way - without explanation, is adopting the same philosophies that a believer relies on.
Not that I don't do the same damn thing.
That having been said, I find this entertaining enough to give it a yellowed snowman (courtesy of SupremeDreamer).
I shall keep it in my fridge to preserve this honor forever and ever and ever. (Its genuine golden urine right?)
Oh religion never loses its comic value, atleast not for me. Not really bitch-slappin em.. well cept for the pope, but hes a little man in a big big cosmic coke machine.
I did this piece while thinking "what if I was god? What would i be doing/thinking at this moment? etc"
Then stars turned to cocaine and my all-powerful lightbulb pointed me to the light. Hence God V2 "Scarface Edition"
Also, I just love it when people say I'm victimizing the simple-minded & faithful... Theres no better feeling than feeling like an asshole to the core.