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Thoughts

by drnick

Member since 2005 · Posted 31 Jul 2005 · 4 comments

Darker it becomes The deeper you go That which you seek Is that which will grow Infinite trails and motionless travel Intelectual opinions And mindless babble Sure you will find A tormented soul Shattered dreams Which once were whole Constantly searching Through what is known But what you seek Has yet to be shown

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[7] LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jul-05/6:39 AM Reply
hmm..cathy little thing...yeah, I like it well enough. Doesn't Intellectual have two l's?
[n/a] ALChemy 1-Aug-05/3:32 AM Reply
Ditch the third verse. This is a thinkers poem. There's no place for melodrama. The last line isn't much of a revelation and it could end many different ways and still be as thought prevoking. ie. "is to not be alone" or "will never be shown" or "is the journey your on". The answer of answers should be a big surprise even if it's not.
[5] Dovina 1-Aug-05/8:50 AM Reply
The first verse is good; I hoped you would develop that theme. Instead, you contrqdict yourself.
[8] hendrimike 18-Aug-05/7:16 PM Reply
mikey likes it