replying on When He's In Me by J.B. Manning
2 Sep 2003, 4:34 PM
hmm, interesting point on the love being queer part. I think I'll keep it though. It's more of an exclamation to myself. The invitation/interpretation part is not to your liking? Hmm, that's my favorite part. Oh well. Thanks for the 7.
on Ashes to Ashes by Irischer Junge
2 Sep 2003, 4:31 PM
This poem sucked. Both context and quality. Bleh.
on Back In Time by stolenpurity
2 Sep 2003, 4:09 PM
*catchy
on Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe
2 Sep 2003, 4:07 PM
*catchy
on Back In Time by stolenpurity
2 Sep 2003, 4:06 PM
bleh...cliche' without the cathy tune.
on As the Redwood Ages by DurtKL
2 Sep 2003, 3:55 PM
I like this. Very nice
on Summer by MaliqaTara
2 Sep 2003, 3:53 PM
I almost wanted to stop half way through and call it cliche' but I read on and the ending closed it just fine. I still think there are a lot of cliche' references, but it has feeling, which is more important the mechanics anyway.
on The empty room by INTRANSIT
2 Sep 2003, 3:50 PM
hmmm
on Mississipi Murder by scitz
2 Sep 2003, 3:50 PM
Kind of good, kind of hard to read. I think you could revise this to something much better. Some of the ryme works and some of it is very hard to read. Good work for a first draft.
on Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe
2 Sep 2003, 3:48 PM
oooooooooh really
on great caesar's ghost by bondjedi
2 Sep 2003, 3:47 PM
redundancy to fit in the framework of a haiku. I don't like it.
replying on When He's In Me by J.B. Manning
29 Aug 2003, 2:35 PM
Us = passionate, lovers, true love, real passion
Them = those who want it, wish they had it, fake it
Them = those who want it, wish they had it, fake it
replying on When Fairy Tales Forgive Us by J.B. Manning
21 Aug 2003, 12:40 PM
be my guest. I sent you an email.
replying on Provacation by J.B. Manning
21 Aug 2003, 10:29 AM
Thanks for the tip. You're right, when I remove it and read it, sounds better. Thanks.
replying on When Fairy Tales Forgive Us by J.B. Manning
20 Aug 2003, 4:44 PM
Thank you. That second line, the one that you didn't like, is in reference to someone who I set aside, expecting to wait, while I face my inner conflicts. 8 is still good. ;-)
on The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos
20 Aug 2003, 2:48 PM
haha, I like the second verse. I like both, but the second best.
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
20 Aug 2003, 1:52 PM
Awesome. Just freaking Awesome.
on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
20 Aug 2003, 1:49 PM
wow. A man of words I am, but I only have one for you. Wow.
on (The vinyards of Tuscany) by Patsy
20 Aug 2003, 1:47 PM
hmmm