Re: Putney at Low Tide by Christof	10-Sep-02/2:39 PM
"Beshitten". Someone contact the Oxford new words dept:) Outstanding imagery. 9.
Re: Avian Child by Tekara	11-Sep-02/11:53 AM
Enjoyable. Excellent first two stanza's. I found the third weaker overall, I would think about cutting it. Just the last line jarred...I think the "not FAIR" exclamation sounds slightly juvenile. The poem said so much to me until then, that last line seemed to cheapen it. I find the scenario you have built, more than just... unfair...something stronger....cheated? 8.
Re: 22nd Anniversary by Frass	11-Sep-02/12:09 PM
I can smell those herbs. "Asurety surely", trips up the tongue but makes me smile. Like you say "vibrant", that's how i find the whole piece. 8.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/12:13 PM
Oh Lord! Starts with teenage angst ends with bible references.1.Oh OK 2. It might (I hope) be ironic and I might be being slow....?
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/12:20 PM
Fantastic rhythm! The repetition works perfectly for me, I didn't have to scan it twice, it felt so natural. You let your voice trail off, then stress the second "some magic", makes me feel that you don't really know exactly what the magic is (which makes it more mysterious/wonderous). Love this piece.10.
Re: Life's Great Irony by Tascobar	12-Sep-02/2:42 PM
Call me a stick in the mud. Maybe if it was well writen I could forgive it's crassness. But it's not, it's just extremely childish. This is the last time I'll bother commenting on one of the many pieces of "litter" on this site. I am wasting my time. No vote.
Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	13-Sep-02/11:39 AM
What's an Iraqian? Talk about know your enemy ;)
Re: winter every day (Don't bother reading this) by unknown	13-Sep-02/2:56 PM
Paints a picture, but treads that fine line between poetry and prose. Then again who's to say.7.
Re: Curse by OneFingerAnswer	13-Sep-02/2:57 PM
Pleasant enough. Couple of typos.7.
Re: America the Beautiful? by pink_punk_kisses87	13-Sep-02/3:03 PM
(sings) ..and the home of the...brave.! Another American outpouring, why do you lot feel so guilty? First stanza hopelessly cliched "a mother cries over a lost son" etc. Find something to be proud of and try to stop whining.2.
Re: Tide by <~>	13-Sep-02/3:08 PM
It doesn't take long to realise there are only a handful of people posting anything rewarding here. You are on my list. Is there very slight assonance between "seawall" and "summer storm"? Very subtle. "Tide,rides,sky" I'm a sucker for rhyme. "Furious with my own leaking" jars slightly, would appreciate explanation of this line.9.
Re: Hard Times by beakism	13-Sep-02/3:09 PM
Is that a "Christ on a bike" reference? Amusing.7.
Re: lovely by pink_punk_kisses87	17-Sep-02/10:52 AM
The phrase "limp hair" made me feel slightly nauseous. It has to be said that this is an improvement on your last offering. I'll keep an eye out for your next.3.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Nov-02/1:50 AM
Saccharine.
Re: confused by little_angel_maria	16-Nov-02/1:54 AM
This is simply hilarious. Please, someone tell me this is a pastiche. I'm not voting 'till I hear. It's a 0 or a 10. It's the ultimate!
Re: Hit & Run by horus8	16-Nov-02/1:57 AM
Nice. The back of one car does not a district make. 9.
Re: Frozen beauty by INTRANSIT	18-Nov-02/10:26 AM
You might not have known what an acrostic was ;), but you know how to write a great haiku .9.
Re: Worth the wait by INTRANSIT	18-Nov-02/10:32 AM
Simple words, simple scenario, simply nice. 8.
Re: A Little Life by Tom Colebrooke	18-Nov-02/10:37 AM
Hey, we all need something a little light weight once in a while. Amusing, one for the kids .8.
Re: I wish.......... by little_angel_maria	18-Nov-02/10:41 AM
"Cealous of my looks" (sic). That is one conceited line, generally poor.2.