Re: The Confession by [mojo]	21-Aug-02/2:13 PM
Wow. I'm new...there's a limit. Oh well, I'm on the voting prowl 'till next week.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Aug-02/2:22 PM
good? good-god? god? odd? odd.
Re: "to do" list:accomplished by razorgrin	21-Aug-02/2:36 PM
The jury is out on the syllables in fire. But as an antithesis to the ubiquitous, gentle, natural world of wonder style haiku, I'll buy it. 9.
Re: Hunny by Venus	22-Aug-02/1:36 PM
Thank God. A gem surfaced in the random file, I was losing hope....excellent work...the image a person being "quitely mauled" will stay with me for some time. Excellent word choice, conjures up genuine feelings of disgust and disquiet.9.
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/10:36 AM
A liberal sprinkling of the Olde English at work here. Mostly pleasant. Dare I mention the word cliche with respect to "loving from afar". Like the conclusion. Loving someone more than ones own dignity is never recommended, but frequently tends to happen. 8.
Re: Terror Too Tranquil by RaychelW	31-Aug-02/2:36 AM
A disturbing subject, deftly handled. 8.
Re: The Stifling Moment by vulcan	31-Aug-02/2:42 AM
I like it, can't put my finger on why. Is there a haiku in there struggling to get out? No, it probably couldn't be edited that far. Still, paints a vivid picture..8..(and a half if we had them)
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	1-Sep-02/1:05 PM
One of the best things I've read here for some time. Frankly i like something with a bit of edge. This is up there with the other bloke ;) (but edgier). Love the way the title suggests the poem is ambiguous, yet for me it has just the right balance between ambiguity and plain narrative. Too much obscure imagary around here for me lately. This cuts through some of the wool like a knife.10 (and i'm fussy).
Re: Her Wildfire Addiction by molly	1-Sep-02/1:17 PM
Cigarette poems seem extremely popular and frankly i think this poem stinks. I'm very rarely hyper critical and will certainly read a selection of a poets work if i have a negative reaction to one of their pieces. I hope i like another piece better. The last stanza sounds like it was written by someone who does not use English as their first language. "Oh Mama"! .0.
Re: I'm Sorry by PawnedTidal	8-Sep-02/9:28 AM
A little work required on stanza two, lines three and four. Not too sure that "compare" was the right choice of word, doesn't seem to make literal sense. Other wise promising.6.
Re: Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism	8-Sep-02/9:46 AM
Good God. "I hate this", and that is one badly drawn fish.0.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/11:58 AM
As luck would have it, this one came up last. I read all your pieces. The erotic ones are "obvious" and I would rate those lowest. Some of the others are "one syllable short of a haiku" (like your haiku which quite literally, well, you know...). But here and there are ideas which are quite inspirational. You are obviously a fan of words (but tend to use some inaccurately). I think the best advice I can offer is to edit two or three of these "proto" poems into one cohesive whole. This work shows promise, I'm sure it'll improve if you keep at it. Like I said this was the best.7.
Re: Oaxaca city fragment by poetandknowit	10-Sep-02/12:43 PM
Hard to read, guess that makes it well written? Hard to give a particularly good score to something so unpleasant.7. Hey, enough of the poetry advice, you need some travel guidance...next time go to Taxco, it's pretty. Come to think of it Mexico City seems better than the place you describe :). Hell, make that 8, it makes me feel good about living in the UK.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/12:45 PM
Well I never. Look everyone...something worthy.9.
Re: Words by PawnedTidal	10-Sep-02/12:49 PM
A little obvious.5.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/2:27 PM
Very nice. Found the narrative drifting on the last stanza though. First s. particularly arresting. Makes you want to hold your breath when you read it, to be quiet. I think it's the "Add up or give reason" bit, marrs an otherwise excellent piece.8.
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	10-Sep-02/2:28 PM
Charming.
Re: while you are away on the islands by poetandknowit	10-Sep-02/2:30 PM
Beautiful but ever so slightly uninteresting. Can't fault the word choice or structure, can't award anything less than a 9 in fairness, but don't feel "rewarded" for having read it...if you know what i mean?
Re: Thank You Mom by savannah	10-Sep-02/2:33 PM
Thanks, but no thanks. Borderline nauseating.1. (Hey I'm sure your "mom" will give it 10.)
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/2:36 PM
Depression, loneliness, heartache, sorrow, pain, suffering....an uplifting read. (ooh..sadness...last stanza). Have a 6. I'd give you 10 if you'd cheer up :)