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Hit & Run (Free verse) by horus8
laughing with a friend leaving the studio he still has glass of merlot sloshing we have been drinking steady all day and night is that a red light? no..it's the back of a honda! standing there we are all confused i say are you okay but he is already calling johnny. i burn rubber down a side street as my liscense plate flips over. some things are better than a d.u.i like a sore necked hangover and a week of door bell paranoia like some more hair of the dog that bit me... and maybe a new bumper.... well..maybe not. maybe louder gram parsons bigger tires and mud flaps would you have stayed? [Joshua tree will never let me be] <plus that was my last drink and chance card> a finger printed glass rolls still in the gutter... lets be a bit more careful...shall we..thanks. i'll try..

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.9444447
Weighted score: 6.8522277
Overall Rank: 311
Posted: October 9, 2002 6:05 PM PDT; Last modified: October 9, 2002 7:21 PM PDT
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[7] god'swife @ 209.179.136.195 | 9-Oct-02/6:44 PM | Reply
Typo S5, L2.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > god'swife | 9-Oct-02/7:23 PM | Reply
thanks. got it.
[n/a] w~* ATHENA *~w @ 66.245.32.85 > horus8 | 9-Oct-02/10:46 PM | Reply
good thing you didn't hit a cat.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 10-Oct-02/5:29 AM | Reply
a ha ha ha. Cheers !!
[7] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.118 | 11-Oct-02/6:58 AM | Reply
I like the "back of a honda". Sounds like quite a time.
[7] Tascobar @ 193.130.87.54 | 15-Nov-02/4:47 AM | Reply
Strangely composed, but I like this one. 7. Try not to drink and drive, though. I find that spillage plays merry hell with the upholstery.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > Tascobar | 17-Nov-02/8:36 PM | Reply
it's pretty incrimidating as a cop approaches you window...also...indeed. thanxs for the box of juicy fruit. perhaps i will trade it for a life, or just some cinnamon life.
[9] [mojo] @ 195.92.168.173 | 16-Nov-02/1:57 AM | Reply
Nice. The back of one car does not a district make. 9.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > [mojo] | 17-Nov-02/8:33 PM | Reply
brother...you aint kidding. good call.??
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