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Worth the wait (Free verse) by INTRANSIT I have unloaded my cars,
leaning on a post I wait
for someone to check them
in.
A mother passes me,
carrying her son, and
six feet behind her
a small, denim jacketed,
pink leg warmed, white
tennis shoed,
blue bereted little girl
follows.
A singular high white
balloon carries her
with teddy bear in arm.
I find myself jealous.
Up the ladder:
A meeting at Maverick, then dinner.
Down the ladder:
Slept
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Posted: October 29, 2002 3:37 AM PST; Last modified: October 29, 2002 3:37 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.43703 Overall Rank: 2996 Comments:
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29-Oct-02/4:35 AM
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ah. yes. so it always is.
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INTRANSIT @ 32.102.20.76
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29-Oct-02/12:08 PM
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This is interesting, the piece I posted first, I thought to be the better piece. This one's getting all the attention. Hmmmm.
A very tender little skech. Simple and honest. By the way, I was interested in what you said about me sounding as if I'd worked on the road - I never have. What is it about my work that makes you think I have?
It smacks of a working class background.
And how are you today, -=Dark_Angel=-?
Your last piece hits close to how it feels to live in a truck for long periods of time.
Simple words, simple scenario, simply nice. 8.
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