Re: Hold and hold me hold tight by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/10:55 AM
this is pretty cool. I was a bit worried by the gimmick early on, but... it flows nicely; definitely captures something and shares it. :)
Re: Smoking Skies by Enchantres	27-Aug-04/10:57 AM
breath -> breathe; it's -> its the rule to put a comma wherever you want a breath is simply wrong.
Re: Countervail by D. $ Fontera	27-Aug-04/10:59 AM
I don't think I really get what this is saying.
Re: Oh So Hollow by etherealmaiden	27-Aug-04/11:01 AM
the flow is very solid; the content blase.
Re: Internal Dialogue (Mental Cock-Slapping & Anal Discipline) by DreamerSupreme	27-Aug-04/11:03 AM
boring and repetitive.
Re: Beached (Or how I learned to give up the day) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	27-Aug-04/2:47 PM
very cute. tightly done. silly, but tightly done and in that silliness is a nice contrast.
Re: Rapid Eye Movement by wilco	27-Aug-04/2:49 PM
I think the title is too ... blatant ... for the rest of the poem. The poem is very nice. Agree with the semi-awkwardness of "nothing makes the night seem lonely like". Maybe just "nothing makes the night more lonely than"? Thoughts.
Re: A Piñon Planter by Dovina	27-Aug-04/2:51 PM
cute. odd. definitely a difficult subject matter to try to make someone take seriously. Delving into the bowels so explicity does not do it for me, I think. Bits here and there don't cohere for me.
Re: Eagledale Drive by klosterfobik	27-Aug-04/2:54 PM
very evocative, though I find I want to know more how you were lost. Is it just the time? I like the line "Can you believe the gray wind of used to be and winter?" "simple perfect" -> "simple perfection"? Or are you making a grammatical pun of some sort that I'm failing to get?
Re: Penumbra by klosterfobik	27-Aug-04/2:56 PM
another one for the love/above list! I like 'clandestine comet'.
Re: corrupting you by skaskowski	27-Aug-04/2:56 PM
twisted. I like. :)
Re: solitude by darylchew	27-Aug-04/2:58 PM
amazingly cliche. a nearly perfect pimple.
Re: My chair by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:26 PM
I like it, though I do not get the _need_, which seems important to the piece as a whole.
Re: it's all quite obviously one big joke by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:27 PM
I really like the flow of this. Bits meander too much for me, but I like it.
Re: My Soul is Stopping by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:28 PM
nice. -10-
Re: TRUTH by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:29 PM
hilarious. :)
Re: metaphorically speaking by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:30 PM
evocative.
Re: we can't walk forever by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:31 PM
you can. you can walk forever.
Re: A friendly conversation with a Native American by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:32 PM
I like it except for the one syllable of "Yeah" towards the end. Well, maybe the last three lines are a bit off for me. I think it works better without, though the tie-back to buffalo is nice.
Re: We are what we hold by somemorepoetry	27-Aug-04/3:36 PM
agree. not bad, not good. though perhaps you've spoiled me now on other poems of yours.