| Re: Perfection by justjay |
2-Aug-03/1:58 PM |
cherry on top of a well iced cake..
wheres the meat? heh. 8.
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| Re: I Can See the Sunset in Her Eyes by justjay |
2-Aug-03/2:00 PM |
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Let me tell you, when your super dreamin a girlfriend, thats the sign that youve gone too far and need a super large dose of reality.. ;) go out get some pussy.
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| Re: Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek |
2-Aug-03/11:55 PM |
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well done. blessed with 10.
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3-Aug-03/4:10 AM |
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jesus christ, i realize that no one knows what a masterpiece is.. this poor thing littered with the low scores of morons who fail to realize the power of these words.. i feel like an idiot not having discovered this godforsakened diamond, i can now say i lived a privileged life.. where else can i read more of your work? eh? im addicted, i want more, your the opium den of my universe. 10. 10. 20. fuck the scale.
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| Re: Parades for cripples (Shit bag) by Thome Plumpe by Bachus |
3-Aug-03/3:24 PM |
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LMAO.. btw, nice going with the repetition of the plum.. but it cant cure everyone man.. some people are just too thick for the fruits medicine to sink in. 10
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| Re: My Single Hatred by cleverdevice |
3-Aug-03/3:26 PM |
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yeah.. i cant stand any insects myself. 8
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| Re: American Eden by Don-Quixote |
4-Aug-03/1:34 PM |
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hey.. thanks everyone for the corrections and such, including suggestions and grammar notations.. very helpful.
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| Re: Moosefart's Revenge by wwFrasier Allonbyww |
4-Aug-03/2:20 PM |
"They even planned my funeral."
Jesus christ you stupid bitch, didn't i tell you before that me and horus didnt plan it, it was simply a sudden thing that HAPPENED.
Fucking crazy whore acts as if it was a godforsakened conspiracy to destroy her bipolar dynasty..
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| Re: Satyrs and fluting the teachers by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
4-Aug-03/3:15 PM |
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lol.. nice. hey, btw are you going to point me to the url of that manly p hall essay or what? I mean, i hate being teased and cheated out of an interesting read.
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| Re: My own Truism by Billy Fights |
5-Aug-03/2:11 AM |
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cmon.. this is like, what, a fourth grade poem? 4.
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| Re: Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe |
8-Aug-03/2:26 PM |
Nice note about "The bottom just sounds copied and forced to be something it doesn't want to be."
"The lake of tears slap"
Lake of tears? can you use some like... imagination?
the top can never be what it wants to be, even at the top, due to it being fattened with worthless cliche crap like that.
"Alone it stands,"
my god.. yeah, that really was an original way to see it.. this needs some style..
looks like it should be titled:
A Poet Weeping on a Pillow...
Stop whining, god thats fucking boring.. skull fuck me to death amazing, i almost blinked.. but no.
I passed out, and i was on meth.. no offense, just my lil ole opinion..
Other than that, its worth an 8, so thats your blessing.
go in peace..
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| Re: Three Brothers by EAger to Offend |
8-Aug-03/5:37 PM |
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not bad, not bad. Doesn't get my blood boilin though. blessed with 8.
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| Re: The Bunny, The Wench, and The Troll by Billy Fights |
8-Aug-03/6:03 PM |
Nice, but now who exactly is this directed at? eh? 9.
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| Re: Stalker by OnTheOtherHand |
8-Aug-03/6:05 PM |
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Nothing like women to inspire a poets pen to write.. nice. 9.
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| Re: Memory by Hostileintent |
8-Aug-03/6:07 PM |
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| Re: Fresh faced Danger-Teen by INTRANSIT |
8-Aug-03/6:19 PM |
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Fucking good.. i really like this poem. 10.
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9-Aug-03/9:13 AM |
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| Re: Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer |
9-Aug-03/3:14 PM |
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*sigh*... im quite happy with this one.. of course, please do point out any problems etc, that i didnt see, this one i want to perfect till it stands solid, unmovable. :)
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
10-Aug-03/7:43 PM |
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HAIRY!!!! OMG ITS A GORILLA! heh. 8.
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| Re: How we found Jesus by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
10-Aug-03/8:59 PM |
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lmao. so when are you going to write a book? ;P 10
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