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Perfection (Free verse) by justjay Your eyes,
Your hair,
Your face.
Perfection that can not be described.
When you smile,
You light up the room.
Your presence in a room alone
Can bring up people's day.
To control a whole atmosphere,
Is a sign of pefection alone.
A perfection that
can only be reached by a few.
You have reached it,
reached perfection from the start.
Up the ladder:
How it should have happened
Down the ladder:
Jack Frost
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Posted: August 2, 2003 1:09 PM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2003 1:09 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.1152606 Overall Rank: 5994 Comments:
Keep thinking. "When you smile,
You light up the room." has been written by every poet in their early work, but you can think of a different, better metaphor.
Hmm mm. Well, it's odd and a bit tingly.
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wheres the meat? heh. 8.