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Stalker (Ode) by OnTheOtherHand It wasn't strange enough
I couldn't get away from you
You had to add
I had killed you too
Your tell-tale heart
it beats in my head
Why is that
when you should be dead?
Why do you follow
when I run away?
I buried you
so why can't you stay?
I took out your eyes
so you couldn't see
I took out your tongue
yet you still talk to me
I threw your corpse
in a shallow loch
It was found
and yet you walk
It wasn't strange enough
I couldn't get away from you
You had to add
I had killed you too
Up the ladder:
The second coming
Down the ladder:
WHY IS THE MEDIA SO LONDON-CENTRIC? Written last Tuesday
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Posted: August 8, 2003 2:04 PM PDT; Last modified: August 8, 2003 2:04 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2689414 Overall Rank: 3839 Comments:
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http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.253
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8-Aug-03/5:35 PM
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Nice allusion to Poe. It didn't really need the repeated verse at the end. Maybe it would be better if you did half a repeated verse, then changed the second half to give us more info.
Nothing like women to inspire a poets pen to write.. nice. 9.
Childish, in every aspect.
You really think of it as childish? How'd you get to that?
I'm almost offended but I'd like an explination before I go that far. 247 view(s)
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