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I Can See the Sunset in Her Eyes (Free verse) by justjay
I can see the sunset in her eyes. The beautiful fading colors, mixing with her own beauty. The sun gleaming off her hair, as if it wanted to reach out and touch it, maybe even with as much passion, as I do. The sparkling shine in the sky, reflecting off her already radiant lips. It caresses her face with the passion, that only I could wish to shed. The sunset has faded now, as does the dream. Maybe tomorrow I will be able to start again, and once again see the beauty that only she can spread.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1
Weighted score: 5.55
Overall Rank: 2476
Posted: August 2, 2003 1:12 PM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2003 1:12 PM PDT
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[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.150.216 | 2-Aug-03/2:00 PM | Reply
Let me tell you, when your super dreamin a girlfriend, thats the sign that youve gone too far and need a super large dose of reality.. ;) go out get some pussy.
[7] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.192 | 2-Aug-03/7:33 PM | Reply
Sweet. Better metaphors and descriptions on this one.
[7] richa @ 81.86.232.193 | 3-Aug-03/11:43 AM | Reply
Pleasant,
[6] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 3-Aug-03/4:25 PM | Reply
"spread" should be "bring". Or if you're a maniac
"scream".
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