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If I Wrote The Perfect Poem (Free verse) by toward if I could write the perfect poem
paint my dreams with rich colors, in vivid detail
wrench the demons from my darkest recesses
my life and thoughts in eloquent relief
if I could do all this
surely my life would be fixed
peace, satisfaction, and fulfillment would blossom like clover
temptation would wither and return to dust
frustration would melt and evaporate
just writing it down would be enough
just getting it out would make it real
if I wrote of a tropical paradise and blissful love
I would be set there forever more
if I sketched a path forward for those I love
our blessings would be manifest
if I enumerated human weakness
we would be healed
if I could write the perfect poem
maybe everything would be better
in the meantime
I'll keep typing
to amuse myself
and unload some baggage
maybe I'll stumble over perfection on the way
Up the ladder:
I Can See the Sunset in Her Eyes
Down the ladder:
I wish I had a friend
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.1
Posted: September 12, 2003 1:05 PM PDT; Last modified: September 12, 2003 1:05 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.55 Overall Rank: 2477 Comments:
in the meantime
I'll keep typing to amuse myself and unload some baggage maybe I'll stumble over perfection on the way **************** That sums up what I've been reading in editors notes lately. A lot of editors say that poetry is getting longer and dragging on with everyone typing this day and age. Its just so easy for them to keep typing and typing I've found it to be true. Its all to easy to just keep going. It was never like that when I was hand writing everything. I believe the poem would say as much if not more taking the lines from above totally out of it. Or maybe... In the meantime I'll keep working towards perfection, Perhaps stumble upon it along the way.
Yeah, in thinking about your previous comment, I was wondering how it would be if I just left out those last lines. Somehow, I wanted to convey that I wasn't truly convinced of the stuff above... but I think maybe you're right. Thanks
I heard Toni Morrison say that once, too. She said that with computer writing, people don't chose their words as carefully. You know I read that Flannery O'Connor, even well into her chronic pain and fatigue due to lupus, would start her writing each day by rewriting every line up to that point in the story, then continue from there. I'd never edit if I had to write that way, but notice how succinct her stories are. Anyway, the length of my comment shows that I am guilty.
I like it!
chaos is the only pefection the universe knows. To organize lawfully in order to destroy repeatedly.
amen.
That doesn't mean anything at all.
The body rules the mind, don't fool yourself.
The first step is to include an ASCII pickle.
I have already written the perfect poem. Maybe you might be able to write the second best poem or something.
(See "THE BEST POEM EVER!!!!!!!")
stumbling and rolling around is a good way to learn about the grass.
"its green and soft" yeah. i know. "Dur" 7 [mental note: dark, im MR. Simpleton, but your MISS FAGGOT.] 143 view(s)
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"be manifest" just doesn't sonud right either.