poemranker ::I wish I had a friend by un_oying

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 69779

I wish I had a friend

by un_oying

Member since 2003 · Posted 11 Oct 2003 · 5 comments

The glass is so cold The body is bold The flavor is old 2003 sure is a good year I sip from the glass I say it’s my last I lied I drink and I drink It’s to bad I can’t think Someone please tell me to stop I stumble and mumble My fingers they fumble Oh where oh where are my keys The walk from the bar It sure seemed far I can’t wait to get home and sleep The lights are so bright From the darkest of night Oh where oh where is the road The last I remembered It was my right of way Now I lay here in the grave I wish I had a friend.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 6.10 weighted 5.55 rank 2476 views 195 View voting details →

10 votes so far. Yours would make 11.10 votes so far

5 comments

[6] peaceseeker 12-Oct-03/9:48 AM Reply
pretty depressing.
[6] Shuushin 12-Oct-03/9:59 AM Reply
Remember, friends don't let friends use the wrong "to/two/too": 3rd stanza, "to" s/b "too".

I knew you were dead by S5. Cute; have a 6.
[4] Freethinker1602 12-Oct-03/2:34 PM Reply
it's the truth. america has issues. hell all of the earth has issues.
[5] horus8 12-Oct-03/3:38 PM Reply
Right now? We're wishing you had a friend too. It would spare us the trouble of foraging through your rubbish for a reason. A reason to why and how you've made it this far without losing a limb or accidentilly blaming the world for your stupidity. unless you have, then naturally, I apologize.
[3] LilMsLadyPoet 11-Jul-05/9:29 PM Reply
oh, dang...it was going along so well, and then the last four lines..ugh! also, >"It’s to bad I can’t think", should be TOO. I would be perfectly happy if you just dropped the last four lines...then I could give you a decent score...either that, or do something else with the ending.