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Don't fuck with Mr. Haiku (Haiku) by SupremeDreamer
He is very subtle; uses a few select words- then smashes your face.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.5
Overall Rank: 2674
Posted: November 26, 2003 1:30 AM PST; Last modified: November 26, 2003 1:30 AM PST
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[9] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.46 | 26-Nov-03/6:03 AM | Reply
Like Bruce Lee jumping out of a cherry blossom.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.170.78 > INTRANSIT | 26-Nov-03/12:29 PM | Reply
You sir? Have inspired me again.
[6] kingit @ 67.68.51.140 | 26-Nov-03/7:05 AM | Reply
disappointing...r u one of those multi-monickered ones?
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.170.78 > kingit | 26-Nov-03/12:13 PM | Reply
Yes, I am blessed with many titles. And personalities. :)
[7] Caducus @ 195.92.168.165 | 27-Nov-03/3:13 AM | Reply
says what a haiku does , a haiku about a haiku - novel idea 7
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.172.89 > Caducus | 27-Nov-03/8:43 PM | Reply
it started with the title, it sprung into my mind all of a sudden late at night- dont fuck with mr haiku- then I thought

"hrmm, haiku like a punker in the mosh pit? smashin."

though, i was worried about it having been done before, but so far it seems im original & sparkin up my own twist on haiku.

thank you for the comment and grade- need it since ive only just started doin these, and I just know 575- say something clever/reflective.

its not easy as a street poet. ;/
[8] richa @ 81.178.252.98 | 27-Nov-03/8:36 AM | Reply
More a senryu (a haiku has a nature theme). Giving this a nature theme would be impressive.

Good though, the soft feel of the words and then bang.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.172.89 > richa | 27-Nov-03/8:27 PM | Reply
I thought modern haiku's more flexible? then again- poets these days break more rules, think I'll do some research on the haiku.

senryu... someone give me a link for all poetic forms, been cravin a big crash course- and would love to know my options.
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