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Sonnetias (Sonnet) by MacFrantic This day at last has come undone and still
Something to be desired ever lasts
An emptiness for which there is no fill
A craving deepened by thoughts of our past
The wandering soul approaches just so keen
His wondering hastened only by the sun
An apperception laced in satin sheen
Creation, death amounted by the gun
Ask again and may you encounter scorn
In order to indulge this muddled trance
These casket littered sanctuaries mourned
From idle waltz to solemn, arcane dance
By right and life omit this fatuous rule
Who act so stout most often act the fool
Up the ladder:
I wish I had a friend
Down the ladder:
Don't fuck with Mr. Haiku
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Posted: May 2, 2004 7:43 PM PDT; Last modified: June 21, 2004 4:29 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.55 Overall Rank: 2479 Comments:
As a footnote, the suffix *-ias* means a speech, or figure of speech, designed to move the passion.
So true. Well done.
the first and last lines aare great, but all that ramble inbetween...oy.
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"A craving deepened by our thoughts of past"
L9:
"Just ask again and you'll encounter scorn"
not too shabby, not too shabby at all. An extra bit for a sonnet.