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Sonnet № 100023

Sonnetias

by MacFrantic

Member since 2003 · Posted 2 May 2004 · Edited 21 Jun 2004 · 4 comments

This day at last has come undone and still Something to be desired ever lasts An emptiness for which there is no fill A craving deepened by thoughts of our past The wandering soul approaches just so keen His wondering hastened only by the sun An apperception laced in satin sheen Creation, death amounted by the gun Ask again and may you encounter scorn In order to indulge this muddled trance These casket littered sanctuaries mourned From idle waltz to solemn, arcane dance By right and life omit this fatuous rule Who act so stout most often act the fool

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4 comments

[9] Shuushin 21-Jun-04/5:54 PM Reply
L4 try:
"A craving deepened by our thoughts of past"

L9:
"Just ask again and you'll encounter scorn"

not too shabby, not too shabby at all. An extra bit for a sonnet.


[n/a] MacFrantic 21-Jun-04/7:00 PM Reply
As a footnote, the suffix *-ias* means a speech, or figure of speech, designed to move the passion.
[10] sliver 21-Jun-04/8:07 PM Reply
So true. Well done.
[4] god'swife 28-Jun-04/11:18 AM Reply
the first and last lines aare great, but all that ramble inbetween...oy.